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The article was not promoted by GrahamColm 16:00, 26 May 2012 [1].

Otis Redding[edit]

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Nominator(s): GoPTCN 16:59, 6 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Following the first Catholic Church FA, I present you an article from an underrepresented area, namely Soul music. The article was nominated thrice at GAN and once at FAC, but it never passed the nomination. The reviewers of the last GAN opposed the promotion for minor reasons that I had already explained. Since the first FAC, the article was copyedited by many editors and two sections were added.GoPTCN 16:59, 6 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Note: This is a WikiCup nomination. The following nominators are WikiCup participants: GreatOrangePumpkin. To the nominator: if you do not intend to submit this article at the WikiCup, feel free to remove this notice. UcuchaBot (talk) 00:01, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments ~ Without a proper peer review, or succsessful GAN, I'm not sure this nom will last long, but I'll do my best to help out in the meantime. — GabeMc (talk) 00:07, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there any need for those two cites in the lead? If this info is properly covered and cited to in the article body, then these can be removed from the lead (see WP:CITELEAD). Same with the cites in the infobox.
    • Yes, because I am unable to integrate bits into the sections.--GoPTCN 07:24, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"[W]as an American soul singer-songwriter, record producer, arranger, and talent scout."[4] This could/should be integrated into the first few lines of his career section. "His open-throated singing", should be integrated into a style or legacy section, which the article will likely need to pass FA anyway. — GabeMc (talk) 21:12, 9 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Such as? --GoPTCN 07:43, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, I mentioned that he was also a talent scout, producer and an arranger in the "Songwriting" section.--GoPTCN 09:47, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Also, the lead is intended to be a summary of the article body, so really, there should not be any information in the lead that is not covered in the article. — GabeMc (talk) 00:57, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No, convtroversial statements can be mentioned in the lead only, see WP:LEAD.--GoPTCN 07:44, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry, I think you may be misreading that. Controversial statements may sometimes need to be cited in the lead yes, but the lead should summarize the article, so if its not in the article, it shouldn't be in the lead. — GabeMc (talk) 08:22, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
So basically you are suggesting that the body should contain duplications of what is already in the lead, and which is cited there? --GoPTCN 09:47, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Its not my suggestion, its how the lead is intended to be. You can have info in the article body that is not in the lead, but not the other way around. Again, this is not my opinion, its how it works here at wikipedia. See WP:LEAD, "Significant information should not appear in the lead if it is not covered in the remainder of the article." — GabeMc (talk) 22:26, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment - Is there any need for the cites in the infobox? This material should be covered in the article body, and there should be no need to cite it in the infobox. — GabeMc (talk) 21:54, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Non-print sources should not be italicized, as in cites #50, 77, 90, 119, 120 (Allmusic, NME, Billboard.com/Rollingstone.com, whereas cites to actual Billboard, or Rollingstone issues should be italicized.), use the publisher field instead of the work field for non-print sources.
    • Done all except 120, as the magazine is the work.--GoPTCN 07:24, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Locations are missing for some sources in the bibliography, this should be made consistant. — GabeMc (talk) 00:07, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Rolling Stone Magazine Staff (1967). The Rolling stone record review. 1. Pocket Books." Needs isbn.
  • "MacDonald, Ian (2005). Revolution in the Head: The Beatles' Records and the Sixties (Second Revised ed.). London: Pimlico (Rand)." Per WP:ISBN, "Use 13-digit ISBNs, if available, as these are now standard as of January 1, 2007 and issued to new books." same with: "Appiah, Kwame Anthony; Gates, Henry Louis; Gates, Henry Louis, Jr. (2004). Africana: An A-to-Z Reference of Writers, Musicians, and Artists of the African American Experience. Philadelphia, Pa.: Running Press." Use 13-digit isbn. — GabeMc (talk) 00:23, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Source review

  • Spot checks:
    • Footnote 29 states "The Chitlin Circuit was a string of venues where black performers and audiences were welcome during the years of racial segregation in the mid-20th century." but the article states "These performance venues were safe for African-American musicians during the era of racial segregation which lasted into the early 1960s." which is subtly different - "lasted into the 1960s" is a bit different meaning than "during the years of racial segregation in the mid-20th century."
    • Footnote 27 is supported by its source and properly paraphrased.
    • Footnote 33 is supported by its source and properly paraphrased.
    • Footnote 37 uses http://allmusic.com/album/complete-unbelievable-the-otis-redding-dictionary-of-soul-r16348/charts-awards/billboard-single but that's just a bare listing of the chart positions. This does not support the information ""Try a Little Tenderness" was included on his next album, Complete & Unbelievable: The Otis Redding Dictionary of Soul. Although the song was commercially successful—it peaked at number 25 on Billboard's Hot 100 chart and at number 4 on R&B singles chart—the album was not." ... the part about the album not being successful isn't supported.
      • Removed original research and reworded.--GoPTCN 09:31, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Footnote 68 ... http://www.thedailypage.com/daily/article.php?article=15622 I cannot find any mention in this source of the information it is supposedly supporting in the article : "In 2007, a memorial plaque was placed on the lakeside deck of the Madison convention center, Monona Terrace." Has something gotten lost in the various copyedits?
      • Replaced and corrected date.--GoPTCN 09:31, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Footnote 123 http://www.exploregeorgia.org/Georgia/Attractions/Otis-Redding-Statue-at-Ocmulgee-Heritage-Trail-Gateway-Park/400580 ... I'm not seeing anything in this source from the Rhythm and Blues foundation at all??? Does not support the text "The Rhythm and Blues Foundation named Redding as the recipient of its 2006 Legacy Award."
      • I replaced the reference and corrected the name of the award. I believe something went wrong during the several copyedits.--GoPTCN 09:31, 14 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Otherwise, sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Definitely needs a full check of sourcing for problems. Ealdgyth - Talk 16:13, 13 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments by Ling:
    • Both Dicaire & Moore are not cited in the article. Suggest removing references. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 13:57, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Agree and done.--GoPTCN 14:39, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Two versions of Mr. pitiful anecdote. Which is correct, and why in two places? – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 14:24, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • The next sentence is "Subsequently Cropper and Redding wrote a song with that name", therefore I believe it is better to introduce the name of the song.--GoPTCN 14:39, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • You have a section about "Stage performances, personality, personal life and wealth"? That's a coherent section? I don't know if this needs a rewrite, or its content moved, or simply a rename (unlikely to be that simple), or what. I will think about it. But it is distracting & incoherent. Sorry. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 14:30, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • I can merge the content to "Legacy", but the section then becomes too large.--GoPTCN 14:39, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • ""It is currently a revisionist theory to equate soul with the darker side of man's musical expression, blues. That fanner of the flame of 'Trouble's got a hold on me' music, might well be the father of the form if it is, the glorified exaltation found in church on any Sunday morning is its mother." This is directly relevant to Otis Redding? – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 14:46, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Yes, seems to be a meaningful sentence about his songwriting and his legacy.--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The exhibition, from September 14, 2007, through September 10, 2008, was named "Museum Exhibition of the Year" by the Georgia Association of Museums and Galleries in January 2008"' Also doesn't seem relevant to redding. trivia-ish. – Ling.Nut3 (talk)
    • " but had to pay $450 to King Curtis' band for the notes". What notes? the back-up music? Why does this sound like it comes from the source reference? – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 14:55, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • It simply means "sheet of music". Agree, too colloquial. Changed.--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "He also spoke about meeting with Muhammed Ali and other stars. Ben E. King, who performed with Redding at the Apollo, gave him $100 when he heard about his financial situation." The article is not about Huckaby. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 14:55, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • True, it does not tell anything about him. It is interesting to know who he and Redding met.--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "For the "Big O Ranch" he spent about $125,000. As the owner of the Otis Redding Enterprises of Macon, he earned through performances, music publishing ventures and royalties from record sales more than a million dollars in 1967 alone." Stylistically awkward. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 15:01, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • You have a suggestion?--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Rollin 1967" Rolling Stone...– Ling.Nut3 (talk) 15:19, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Yes, it is a short footnote.--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "including positive press in Los Angeles Times" Did you find this positive press?
      • Not exactly sure what you mean... Do you want me to search for it?--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • This article leans very heavily on Guralnik, Bowman, and various online sources. Tha worries me for two reasons: first, can we find better sources (eeven than Guralnik & Bowman)? second, the prose just has a flavor or feel that seems to be taken from sources...– Ling.Nut3 (talk) 15:19, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Guralnick and Bowman are among the best and most reliable sources. There are no biographies which can supersede these books. No, I adequately paraphrased the content. Regards.--GoPTCN 17:02, 20 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      1. Geoff Brown. Otis Redding: Try a Little Tenderness. Canongate. 2003. 176pp.
      • It only received three stars and it is cited in Guralnick and Bowman.--GoPTCN 08:04, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      1. Scott Freeman. Otis! The Otis Redding Story. New York: St. Martin's Press. 2001.
      • It was received poorly, see talk.--GoPTCN 08:04, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      1. Jane Schiesel. The Otis Redding Story. Doubleday. 1973. 143pp.
      • This is an essay at best...--GoPTCN 08:04, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      1. Delehant, Jim ( 2004) "The Blues Changes from Day to Day" "Otis Redding Interview" In D. Brackett (Ed.) The Pop, Rock, and Soul Reader: Histories and Debates [Note that an older edition seems to have had a chaper titled "Southern Soul and Otis Redding"] Oxford University Press. OUP usually has good stuff....
      • What is this stuff? Do you have a source whether they are reliable or not? I only use high-quality sources. Interviews are usually uhelplful and too egocentric; genre bigraphies have the same information as other do. What is "OUP"? Regards.--GoPTCN 08:04, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The single was released on the Volt sister label on October 1962, but charted in March the following year" What chart? rhythm-and-blues? pop? How well did it do on any charts?– Ling.Nut3 (talk) 02:47, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • It simply charted.--GoPTCN 08:04, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • THe discography I found has things not in yours. I pasted it into your talk page for you to examine 7 see if anything needs to be added etc.. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 03:46, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose per 1a and 1c. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 04:57, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Please explain your oppose. Why do you want more sources? Do they add significant content? Did you read the books or just copy-and-pasted the titles?--GoPTCN 08:31, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • The sources I listed are mentioned more than once in other articles as being the definitive sources. It seems to me that perhaps they are at least as good as your, and perhaps better. And even if they are not, such heavy reliance on one source is ill-advised when others that are certainly no less notable are available...You have one and only one quote from Freeman (which, if you were my student, would make me think you copied someone who quoted Freeman), and none from the other two. The writing needs more than a little polishing, and in some sections may even merit a complete rewrite. Those are concrete and actionable Opposes. Beyond that, there is a less concrete and less actionable aspect: I just get the feeling that the topic has not been covered as well as it could have. This is in part due to the sourcing issues I just mentioned, and in part due to the fact that when I was done reading, I remembered a few blurbs praising Redding, but I didn't really have an understanding of the depth and breadth of his impact. Baker's Biographical Dictionary of Musicians (Via HighBeam) describes Redding "the single most important and influential male soul artist of the 1960s". I really think that anyone who merits such high praise must have been analyzed at a deeper level by better sources than those on the Internet... The whole article, in general has the feel of something mashed together from subpar sources and without a lot of careful thought about the content. Please don't take any of this personally. You can always rework and renominate. Excellent writing and research are usually multi-step processes. – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 10:08, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • Dear LinkgNut, I don't know where you found that they are the definite sources, but I tell you that they are not very WP:RS. How can you tell they are reliable if his wife and Phil Walden even accused the author of one of the allegedly reliable source that he wrote hoaxes? Explain this to me. I don't think that if anything is mentioned many times is also reliable; I have a biography about Dostoyevsky and it has 6 pages of further reading material, and they weren't even peer reviewed! So tell me how that is possible. And you believe the prose is not "polished"; it was "polished" by many skilled writers. You did not name examples of bad prose, then how can I trust you? Furthermore, even if I buy or borrow this book (the latter is impossible here in Germany) then will you still oppose when I tell you that there were no important information? What will I need to do to prove that these books duplicated the information of Guralnick, Bowman and co? Guralnick's book received many awards, and Bowman's book about the history of Stax Records is the best book about this company and Soul music general.--GoPTCN 16:15, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
          • You have focused only on the sourcing issues, and not the substandard writing.... If I have time, i will try to track down the references I saw and post them here. Feel free to leave your nom open and see if a wave of support materializes from other reviewers. If that happens, then you will have been proven to be right. Cheers – Ling.Nut3 (talk) 02:11, 22 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose - Per Ling.Nut3. This article needs a proper peer review, then to pass GA before returning here. — GabeMc (talk) 05:00, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Thanks, but you did not review it properly. Elaborate why it needs a pr and gan? Several articles passed without. What will a peer review bring? What do the reviewers post there? And why not post issues here? If there are too much issues, then at least explain your position properly. I used the best sources about Redding. The mentioned books are jokes compared with the books listed in this article.--GoPTCN 08:31, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment from Noleander - I've read the article and I've read the comments above. I sympathize with the nominator because the issues mentioned above are not "smoking gun" problems (e.g. not all biographies are worthwhile sources); and the latter Oppose is short on details. On the other hand, the article has not had a Peer Review nor a successful GAN. The article looks decent, but upon reading it, I see some potential improvements, such as moving the "Another characteristic was his raw voice ..." material out of the "Legacy" section and into the 'Stage presence, ..." section. My recommendation to the nominator is to withdraw the nomination; have it go through a Peer Review, and then re-nominate it. I'd be happy to do a thorough Peer Review, if the nominator would like. --Noleander (talk) 17:51, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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