Talk:2008 American League Central tie-breaker game

GA Review

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Reviewer: KV5 (Talk • Phils) 16:10, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

OK, Stax, if you really want me to, here I go. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 16:10, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

Comments from KV5

• "won the game 1–0" - commas around the score (, 1–0,)
• "lowest scoring gam" - lowest-scoring
• comma after ALDS
• move "3 games to 1" to the end of the sentence, and precede with a comma; also MOS:NUM (three and one)
• "In baseball statistics" - comma after
• "start of the season" - comma after
• "the top two finishers" - clarify, the division's top two finishers
• "the previous season" - in the previous season
• "last on May 17th" - MOS:DATE, May 17 (occurs twice)
• "a share of the league" - I think you meant a share of the lead
• "The Twins spent much of the season second to the White Sox" - reads a bit awkwardly, suggest re-word The Twins spent much of the season in second place behind the White Sox, and comma after
• "Despite going 11–15 in September" - comma after
• "September 25th" - MOS:DATE
• "which capped" - that capped
• "September 29th" - MOS:DATE (occurs twice)
• "won, 8–2" - comma after
• "Fans were encourage" - encouraged
• "as their starter" - starting pitcher, link it, and comma after
• "top of the 5th" - fifth
• "Danks then induced"
• comma after "Delmon Young"
• "Brendan Harris then hit"
• Remove double period ("Griffey, Jr..")
• "7th inning" - seventh
• "to ground out" - comma after
• "but then allowed a double"
• Where does A-Ram figure into this? He's played his whole career for the Bucs and Cubbies.

• Wow. I'm fixing everything else, but this deserves a special comment. It's Alexei Ramirez, but I saw A. Ramirez in the game summary and didn't even think when I wrote Aramis. Apologies. Staxringold _talk^contribs 16:41, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

• Check your diacritics; there are some plain links redirecting to names of Latin players with accented letters (Mijares, Ramirez, etc).
• "in the 9th" - ninth
• "White Sox" - this is possessive ("White Sox'")
• "Danks drew praise for his performance in the game." - ref?
• "Twins' batters" - rm apostrophe
• "Michael Cuddyer" - can remove his first name after first mention
• "22–40" - should be 22-for-40 or, better yet, something written out for non-baseball readers, like Twins batters Joe Mauer, Justin Morneau, and Cuddyer had a combined 22 hits in 20 at bats
• "against John Danks" - rm first name
• "for their career" - careers, multiple subjects; comma after
• "With the victory" - comma after
• "pennant winning" - pennant-winning
• comma after "Rays"
• comma after "Statistically"
• "4th most" - fourth-most
• rm first names in "Legacy" section from Danks, Mauer, Morneau
• "3.32 in the game" - comma after

That should do it. On hold. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 16:32, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

• All done. Staxringold _talk^contribs 16:45, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

• Well done. Pass. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 16:47, 15 May 2010 (UTC)