Wikipedia:Peer review/Mercury (planet)/archive1

Mercury (planet)[edit]

This article is tagged as a "good article," and I believe it has potential to become a featured article. Nevertheless, I appreciate more ideas to get the article to that point. Pentawing 23:12, 11 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

This article looks like it has developed fairly piecemeal over time, and would hugely benefit from one editor thoroughly honing the prose to make it flow better. I'm not sure the current organisation is the best or most logical and it could do with some thought. I think I added some of the references, but probably a few more are needed for quoted facts. The enormous table showing dates of elongations seems pretty pointless to me, something for wikisource maybe but not an encyclopaedia. Also, the Mercury in fiction sections seems far too large; it could be trimmed substantially. I'll read the article more thoroughly over coming days and see if I can make any meaty content suggestions. Worldtraveller 01:39, 12 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
- I'll try to read through the article and repair the prose, but I would need someone to confirm some of the information. The table of elongations also appears in the other planet articles, so I am not sure if the table should be removed. As for the "Mercury in fiction" section, should it be moved into its own subarticle? Pentawing 01:47, 12 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
- I moved the "Mercury in fiction" section to its own subarticle. I also read through the article and tried to repair as much of the prose as possible. Pentawing 05:35, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
The article is looking good, on the whole. Here are some more comments:
- Occasional bits of awkward prose still need fixing, eg "which is over 300 times smaller than that of Jupiter, which is..."
- Some statements need expanding, and sources citing. Why is the axial inclination so low? Who has suggested that it might be a Chthonian planet? Is there a source for the quote that it takes more fuel to reach Mercury than to escape from the Solar System?
- I think everything important about the planet is covered, but some sections could do with expanding a bit: Historical understanding (much more could be said here I think), Interior composition, Magnetosphere, and the space missions section. The Mariner missions deserve a couple more paragraphs, and there is plenty of info on the upcoming missions which could be interesting.
- The intro needs work, I think, to be more of a summary of the whole article content. The middle paragraph is good (although the word "nevertheless" seems a bit of a non sequitur), but for example in the third paragraph it seems strange not to mention why it was thought to be two objects. Worldtraveller 20:27, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  - Guys, take a look at DE version, that is a nice article. English one not even close to "good". TestPilot 01:56, 16 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
    - Unfortunately, I don't understand German very well. Could you point out some things that the German article has that the English article lacks? Pentawing 02:01, 16 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]