Wikipedia:Peer review/Israeli apartheid/archive1

Israeli apartheid

I feel that this article has POV issues and because of the highly controversial nature of this topic it would be best to bring in the wides part of the Wiki community possible in order to weigh in on this article. This topic is embraced by certain groups and condemned as fictional by others. It would be great to find a way to build and expand this article in a way in which, at least, minimized POV. --Strothra 03:52, 29 May 2006 (UTC)

Provide WP:CITE information for references/footnotes instead of the inline links. See also WP:CITE/ES; templates like {{Cite web}} and {{Cite book}} may be useful here. Also consider merging Apartheid wall into this article as they repeat many of the same ideas. Jon513 15:42, 29 May 2006 (UTC)

• If it survives AfD, I suggest taking this to Wikipedia:Pages needing attention. Thanks. — RJH (talk) 00:18, 30 May 2006 (UTC)

In the intro, I would suggest you rewrite the intro, just to make it smaller bites. Explain in one sentence what it is, use a second to say who uses it, and a third to give more detail.

I would second the request for actual references <ref>[website here]</ref> would be much preferred, as would hardcopy citations.

As for the bias, I do know that it does not mention Palestinians not being able to get to a town to give birth because of the hours long waits where they are often randomly denied access to pass... I have seen documentaries on that, and I'm sure someone could find information on that. I also think that it is biased to have a link to Anti-semitism, seeing as it is completely POV to suggest that any criticism of Israel is anti-semetic....... for one, there were many more semetic peoples than the Jews, and second, Israel is a political state, not all Jewish people. I know of a rabbi who speaks against Israel's actions. Other than that, it seems balanced and just needs more citations and perhaps more reputable citations.

KV 23:15, 3 June 2006 (UTC)