Talk:Rum/GA1

GA Review

After reviewing the article according to the Good Article Criteria, I have declined GA status for this article for the reasons listed below. I do see clear potential in the Rum article for Good Article status and even Featured article status. I wholeheartedly encourage the editors to resubmit for GA review after the concerns below have been addressed. To aid in the review, I compared this article to the Feature Article quality of the Tea article and the Good Article Quality of Milk and Riesling.
1. It is well written. - Pass The article is written with compelling prose with no glaring violation of WP:MOS. All topics of technical complexity are either explained in the article or supported with a Wiki-link.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable. - Needs Improvement

• The article has several key details that need some source of reference citation for the benefit of WP:V, especially in the Origins of the name section.
• The lack of in-line citation as laid out in WP:CITE makes verification difficult and would be a neccessary addition. (Particularly to the history section). I see the "in note" cites on the edit page but it is rather cumbersome and silly to have to keep clicking "edit" in order to view a source for a particular claim.

3. It is broad in its coverage. - Needs Improvement

• There is sense that comes across after reading the article that there is more to the story. Areas which I feel need expansion is "Rums Impact on the Slavery". There is brief mention but there is so much more that can be written. Another area that is missing is the perception of Rum in popular culture.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy - Pass

• The article follows a NPOV tone without showing an imbalance to any particular regional variety or style of rum.

5. It is stable- Weak Pass

• There have been some notable changes to the article since it's nomination on August 21st (especially in this past week). In reviewing them, while signifigant, I would ultimately categorize the bulk of them as cosmetic in nature which is why I gave this section a weak pass

6. It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic. - PASS

• The article has enough images to satisified GA criteria, however for FA Consideration I would look into finding suitable additions that could be beneficial as visual illustration. For instance, a chart of some sort with mention of Rum consumption or production (especially among the Caribbean countries in a sort of historical context). Under Production methodology you have a photo of sugarcane which relates to a degree to rum through the production of molasses but as a reader I would be more curious about how the rum looks through the fermentation or distillation process. Maybe a photo of some of the equipement used. Even a photo of molasse would add a little bit more to that section then the sugarcane photo.

If there is anything else that I can do to be of assistance, please don't hesitate to contact me. Agne 18:09, 17 September 2006 (UTC)