Talk:Demi Lovato/GA1

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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 15:02, 25 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • I couldn't find an archive for that information, so I had to remove it.
  • Fix ALLCAPS refs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:51, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
     Done
  • Fix all Twitter refs to be more like 119 although including the quote is generally not done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:17, 1 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
     Done, I just replaced them with a better reference.
  • I apologize. But on a second readthrough, I am realizing the you have no critical commentary on any of her roles, performances, songs or albums. Without critical commentary, this is really just a proselized discography and filmography. The whole career section needs expansion in this regard. Although most of her awards are teen pop stuff there must be some critical analysis of her performances available in the PD. I am reconsidering my hold, but will give you a chance to respond before I do.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:50, 1 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • Thanks for your feedback. I'll add some critical opinions of her works, and make sure that the additional issues you highlighted are corrected so the review doesn't have to be failed. I'll leave a message on your talkpage when I complete those tasks. WikiRedactor (talk) 17:34, 1 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      • Just leave a note here. I am watching.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:39, 1 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
        • Okay, so I went through each career section and added some critical comments of her projects. (I tried to balance the overall favorable receptions with some minor criticism and areas of concern, to remain neutral.) Let me know what you think, and then we can work from there. Thanks again, WikiRedactor (talk) 16:20, 2 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
WP:LEAD
  • Why is a 2009 picture still the main image? The 2010 image is more recent and seems as good. I kind of understand why the 2012 images might not be preferred, but why 2009 over 2010? Can we find anything newer?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Unfortunately, the resolution for the 2010 picture is to poor to make it the main picture.
 Done
 Done
Early life and career beginnings
 Done
 Done
  • In 2006, she appeared on Prison Break, and on Just Jordan the following year. -->In 2006, she appeared on Prison Break, and she was on Just Jordan the following year.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:10, 28 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
 Done
2007–08
Camp Rock and Don't Forget
  • The premiere date is mentioned in the following section, which gets into more detail about the series.
2009–10
Sonny With a Chance and Here We Go Again
  • "All of the song's proceeds were sent to environmental charities to the Disney Worldwide Conservation Fund." seems ungrammatical.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done, reworded.
  • "Its music incorporated acoustic styles, which she described to be similar to the work of John Mayer." Did Lovato play some type of guitar or other instrument?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done, no she didn't I reworded it to be a bit more clear.
  • "Grey's Anatomy" name and date the episode. If it has a link, link to it and name the season. If not link to the season article.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done, added.
  • If you mean Grey's Anatomy, the episode was not the season finale.
2010–12
Personal struggles, acting hiatus, and Unbroken
  •  Done, corrected.
2012–present
The X Factor and Demi
  • "In March 2012, MTV aired a documentary special," Can you find any critical commentary about this from 3rd parties? All you have included is MTV refs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:06, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done, replaced with Idolator.
  • Were there stories in the press related to her having significant weight fluctuations due to her various disorders and treatments?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:06, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  •  Done, added a brief mention.
Philanthropy
  •  Done, reworded.
Artistry
  •  Done, linked.
Public image
  •  Done to all except the following two protected images: File:Demi Lovato 2, (Cropped).jpg and File:DemiLovatoApr09.jpg.
  • Sure thing, I asked a Commons user to do it, because apparently I am not an established user of the service.
  • The templates have been added to all pictures.

I am putting this article on hold. I will reevaluate it within 7 days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:59, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am now PASSING the article. Good work.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:43, 5 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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