Perhaps see what references are redundant. "Killen previously created the American television drama Lone Star (2010) for the Fox network, which was canceled shortly after airing two episodes due to low ratings.", for example, has 3 references for a fairly simple statement.
"so freaked out" - Not encyclopedic. Direct quotes if it is a direct quote or encyclopedic wording, please. Then again, I don't see the relevance of the sentence in its entirety, especially getting into bed with his wife.
Not done actually (I noticed this because of the Fringe mention). It still says "compared"; I agree that contrasted works better here.Ruby2010/2013 04:28, 4 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"In addition, Killen made it obvious to know which version of Michael's realities you are watching" - No need for "you" (the viewer, probably). Also, should probably indicate which one is the red reality and which is green.
"Other cast members include Wilmer Valderrama and Steve Harris, who each play Michael's partner in one reality, while Cherry Jones and BD Wong each serve as his therapists in one reality." - Not sure this should be the literary present. They no longer "play" his partner, just like Jones and Wong are not serving as the therapist: their characters are.
"Episodes can be purchased in high-definition on the iTunes Store for $US2.99, and for $US1.99 in standard-definition." - That's a bit too much, and sounds rather advertorial. I'd suggest getting rid of that. The other stuff about Amazon is okay IMHO, but others may find it dicey.
Mostly done. I just removed that part about the price of it, but I'd like to keep the rest. TBrandley 14:28, 3 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The last two episodes were scheduled to air as a two-hour finale on May 17, 2012 between 9:00 and 11:00 pm (EST), with episode "Two Birds" scheduled to be part one of the finale, and with "Turtles All the Way Down" scheduled to air as part two." - But? What happened? If it didn't happen, might not be worth mentioning
"It debuted as a mid-season replacement for The Firm, which moved to Saturday nights after Awake's debut in both the United States and Canada." - This may be worth mentioning above, before you go into detail about the show's finale.
"The A.V. Club cited that NBC airing the episodes in the Thursday night 10:00 p.m. (EST) time interval, the same slot as hit drama The Mentalist, contributed to the show's failure." - Too much info (you have a lot of it above). Perhaps "The A.V. Club cited that the Awake's slot, the same as the hit drama The Mentalist, contributed to the show's failure.
These reviews all seem to be for "Pilot" so far. Any retrospectives?
The last paragraph has lots of information on other episodes. TBrandley 21:29, 4 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Lotsssssssssssssssssss of quotes. Any way to paraphrase further?
Done some. TBrandley 21:53, 4 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Awake has received low viewings and ratings since its debut." - This implies that it is still showing. Another way to say this? Perhaps switch to the past tense.
Because their was only one award below, actually before there was five, but one award's page was deleting, and that award that was there was considered not notable for Wikipedia. I forgot to change that before. Cheers, TBrandley 00:52, 5 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
That's still an award. Is it one held by a small group or something? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:56, 5 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]