Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Adam Philippe, Comte de Custine

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No consensus to promote at this time - Peacemaker67 (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 14:07, 23 April 2015 (UTC) « Return to A-Class review list[reply]

Adam Philippe, Comte de Custine[edit]

Nominator(s): auntieruth (talk)

I am nominating this article for A-Class review because...I'm hoping it meets requirements, subject is a key figure in the early victories of the French, and an excellent example of the excesses of Revolutionary "justice" in 1793–1794. auntieruth (talk) 14:28, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)

"Consequently, French commanders walked a fine line between the security of the frontier and clamor for victories which would protect the regime in Paris on the one hand, and the desperate condition of the army on the other.": The writing could be clearer.
"Maréchal de Camp (General of Brigade) fr:Jean Nestor de Chancel": If he's notable by the standards of en.wp (and I assume a General of Brigade will be), then link to an article in en.wp.

there is no en wiki article. I'll get to it eventually.

"who commanded an 40 battalions": ?
"The Cambridge Intelligencer (October 5, 1793) published his epitaph by anonymous.": ?
The text doesn't clarify what An Epitaph for Custine is meant to convey.
"fall", "autumn": consistency. Also, WP:SEASON may be relevant in some cases.
"subsequently": search for this in this and other articles and replace it with "soon", "later", "later on", or "consequently", depending on the meaning.
" signed a petition for her release": whose release?
Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 16:50, 8 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. I am just starting to read, here my remarks: MisterBee1966 (talk) 13:14, 8 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Adam Philippe de Custine began his ..." I believe the full name should only be mentioned once in the article
The main body of the article begins with his military career. I think it would be better to start with his birth so the fact that he was born on 4 February 1740 in Metz is cited.
"Custine learned to admire their modern military organization". Can you give examples of what modern military organization is?

I could, of course, but the source did not say, so I didn't.

Check your dashing and date ranges, there are a few wrong ones, example 1756–1789; 1791–1793 should be 1756–89; 1791–93 and 1756-–63 should be 1756–63
regarding your sources, if no isbn number is available, I think it would help to add the oclc number. I looked up one reference as an example

Additional remarks from ruth

I've been told I included too much of an article paper in this article, so I've removed some of it. Sorry for inconvenience. auntieruth (talk) 01:55, 9 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

File:Regamey,_Frédéric_-_Custine_en_Alsac,_1793,_Conseil_de_guerre_dans_les_lignes_de_Wissembourg.jpg needs a US PD tag. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:50, 27 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

removal? Is someone going to take this down? I don't know how to do it. Turns out too much of it is also in an article I hope to publish, and so....auntieruth (talk) 21:30, 5 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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