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Eros Ramazzotti[edit]

This is an article about a well known Italian singer, it initially was a small article when I first began working on it, I expanded it as much as I could by whatever knowledge I had about the artist and then I did thorough research in order to include information about his early life and details about his 20 years of career. I have included sources for the article, unfortunately, not every single one could be found in English language, some of them are in German. At the moment the article has a Start rating, I'm hoping to get at least a "B" and perhaps it may even qualify for GA rating.--Harout72 (talk) 02:59, 11 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Javascript review[edit]

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  • Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The lead should have an appropriate number of paragraphs, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
  • This article has only one image. Please see if there are any further free use images that fall under the Wikipedia:Image use policy and fit under one of the Wikipedia:Image copyright tags that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to Special:Upload; to upload non-fair use images on the Wikimedia Commons, go to commons:special:upload.[?]
  • Please consider adding {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?]
  • Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
  • The article needs a thorough copyediting for English usage. See User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a for some pointers, or ask for help from a native English speaker who you think may be familiar with the article's subject matter.[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 14:54, 13 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]