Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 July 4

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ChocMic Hello! Please review the recently created article on R&B artist Choc Mic.[edit]

Please let me know what could make it more Wikipedia-appropriate. Thank you so much!

TheMsGreen (talk) 01:34, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please view this link and let me know of you would like any additions or changes made.


Bstradivarius (talk) 02:20, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I need to know if I have enough reliable sources to prove that this group is notable according to the Wikipedia guidelines. I believe that I have more than enough evidence to keep this article from being deleted. Also, there is way more sources for this group's notability than for other groups that have not been deleted for notability issues.

Dan o d 1988 (talk) 09:27, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

hows this? Daniellebarton (talk) 10:56, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

DIALREL(Religious slaughter)[edit]

RPSM (talk) 11:25, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I would like feedback on this as a suitable article to publish on a Therapy Outcome Measure that is used extensively in the UK


Enderbyandjohn (talk) 13:26, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This is a simple stub for an R&D centre.

The centre was founded in 1996 and has had over 100 staff for over 5 years, and has a lot of publications and has engaged in over 160 projects in this period. So there's a lot more could be added, but I was keeping article high level and factual.

I do have a COI with this article as I work here, but I have kept it to a very short summary and remained neutral. I would appreciate feedback on whether my view of this is correct.

mofoghlu (talk) 15:22, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

If somebody could review my article on Gwyneth Bebb that would be great. Thanks. Dante8 (talk) 16:15, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have some concerns about this article. It purports to be a biography of Gwyneth Bebb, yet the content is almost exactly what i would expect if the subject were the case, rather than the plaintiff. There's almost nothing about the subject out of the case itself, and material about the woman, which would be relevant to the case. The one exception is her untimely death, and that would be justifiable in an article about the case.
We don't know anything about where she was born, where she grew up, or the circumstances of her life up until the effective beginning of the case. The info box notes her birthdate and location, but neither fact is referenced, and neither fact is in the body, so they effectively do not exist. She had two babies, but not a hint who she was married to, or if she was married.
I wonder if it would be better to recast this as an article about the case, as the very sketchy details about her life outside the case could be included. By casting it as a bio of someone who might have been notable had she lived, and is arguably notable because of a single event, it may run afoul of BLP1E. Ironically, while one event does not confer notability on an individual involved, it can confer notability on the event itself, and this is a notable event.
My other observation is that the references could be improved in style, see Referencing for beginners for help.--SPhilbrickT 22:44, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

is what I have created for both my personal user space and article for the social network JackTheDonkey.com ok?

Jackthedonkey (talk) 18:18, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Please review my article on Karen Gaffney. Thank you.


Dante8 (talk) 18:36, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Are there sufficient references?

Twincats2000 (talk) 19:57, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The draft is here
To answer your question in a word, "no". There is one source listed in the reference section, but it is not properly formed as a reference. There are no footnotes to indicate which facts are being supported by that reference. See Referencing for beginners for help.
I'm not familiar enough with pen.org to know if it qualifies as a reliable source. I did a quick search at Reliable sources/Noticeboard, but didn't find anything. If it is, it is a start, but you need more. Simply establishing that someone is an author of books is not sufficient to meet the Notability hurdle. Has the author, and/or the books been discussed in reliable sources?--SPhilbrickT 22:59, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thsurudals (talk) 19:58, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

PodgeMcQ (talk) 19:58, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hi I created an article for the noted engineer Hugo Nicolson - I would appreciate your feedback on the article[edit]

Anthonylime (talk) 23:08, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]