Wikipedia:Peer review/Yolanda Saldívar/archive1
Yolanda Saldívar[edit]
- A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for December 2008.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I think that the article is in need of suggestions of improvements and contributions with a Image and more information an updates of the text for the article of Yolanda Saldivar. I think their is a chance of getting this article to "Featured article" standard if we all help.
Thanks, MarkusBJoke (talk) 15:42, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from DiverseMentality
- The main problem I see here is that the article reads as the murder of Selena and Saldívar's trial and imprisonment. There isn't any background information about her; where she was born, wher she grew up, her personal life, her career before her work with Selena and her work with Selena. Simply put, it doesn't read like a biography, but more like the events during and after the murder.
- Under 'After the conviction', the second paragraph is completely unsourced.
- Under the same section, there are two paragraphs that are a sentence long. As for the film information, that can be expanded a little, I suppose. Pointing out that she isn't related to Efren Saldivar seems trivial; just because someone shares a last name doesn't necessarily mean they're related.