Wikipedia:Peer review/United Airlines Flight 232/archive1
United Airlines Flight 232[edit]
Done a lot of work on this and wondered if we can aspire to get it to FA status, and if so, what would need to be done? --Guinnog 19:15, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
- My take:
- I like the article. Good job so far.
- I've added "cn" tags where I think in-line refs are absolutely necessary. You still are going to want to supplement.
- "Captain Alfred C. Haynes and his flight crew (First Officer William Records, who was flying, and Second Officer Dudley Dvorak, flight engineer) felt a jolt going through the aircraft, and warning lights showed that the autopilot had disengaged, and the tail-mounted number two engine was malfunctioning." This is too long and convoluded.
- "As with the Eastern Air Lines Flight 401 crash of a similarly-sized Lockheed L-1011 in 1972, the inherent crashworthiness of newer wide-bodied air transports played a part in the relatively high survival rate, as well as the shallow rate of descent and relatively low speed." Another long and convoluded sentence.
- Lessons learned? Is this the best title name in the world? C'mon. It's POV and Un-encyclopedic.
- Just a light copyedit needed.
- I like the article. Maybe you could trim the sidepaths to similar other crashes jumbled within the prose and just make a sub-section under "See also" called "Similar incedents."
- Wait. You've already started something like this under see also, but you still have the prose content in the article and only have fixed this for 1 reference. Please follow up.
- Just keep an eye on your "notable survivors". There is no problem now, but if this does become a featured article and gets any bit of press attention or is the today's featured article, much junk will end up there.
Evan(Salad dressing is the milk of the infidel!) 02:38, 3 December 2006 (UTC)