Wikipedia:Peer review/Thiruvananthapuram/archive1

Thiruvananthapuram

Formal request for a peer review for this article as a way of preparing for featured article.

-- Rajith Mohan ^{(Talk to me...)} :-) 09:46, 15 September 2006 (UTC)

It's definitely got some good features so I'll just point out some of the things that need fixing. 1. It's got some awkward and possibly non-native speaker writing that needs a significant copyediting to improve, and turning colloquial phrasing into more encyclopedic wording. 2. It also still has a lot of statements of opinion that are not backed by sources "of India’s most literate and socially developed state", "however, much of this high potential growth would depend on the investment and trade union reforms of the government.", etc. Neither are forgone conclusions and need to be worded more neutrally or replaced with referenced statements. 3. What about the infrastructure? Water, power, sewage treatment, etc. It tells about the transportation, but nothing else. The coverage of transport is relatively too much and should be shortened to make room for discussion of other facets of infrastructure. 4. The education section lists some schools but doesn't tell us about the overall quality compared to national and international standard, or even the literacy rate. 5. Demographics could be expanded to discuss poverty and wealth distribution. I hope that's enough for starters to help you improve further, though this is well on it's way. Let me know if you finish this and I'll see what else I can find. - Taxman ^Talk 01:47, 16 September 2006 (UTC)

Sufficient references are added to support the statements like "of India’s most literate and socially developed state", etc. I will soon try to fix the other points also. -- Rajith Mohan ^{(Talk to me...)} :-) 15:59, 19 September 2006 (UTC)

The inline comments by Taxman in the article is addressed, and fixed. -- Rajith Mohan ^{(Talk to me...)} :-) 16:01, 19 September 2006 (UTC)

• Comment- There is no reference to the sentences related to Vizhinjam. References are needed there. --Samaleks 07:26, 20 September 2006 (UTC)

• Inline references to Vizhinjam is added now.. Cheers, -- Rajith Mohan ^{(Talk to me...)} :-) 11:55, 22 September 2006 (UTC)

The article is prepared so as to match it as per the standards mentioned in WP:INCITIES. -- Rajith Mohan ^{(Talk to me...)} :-) 13:01, 26 September 2006 (UTC)