Wikipedia:Peer review/Norman Borlaug/archive1

Norman Borlaug

This man saved a billion lives. Thusly, I've added a great deal to the article and want to make sure everything is in order for it to move on to WP:FAC. Please leave me a comment! --brian0918™ 04:26, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)

• The article has improved heaps, but its still pretty sketchy, the article should be roughly the same size as Linus Pauling covering the topics in more depth, for example the regognition section is way too short, read his CV he has honorary doctorates and awards from most of the world (not suggesting they should all be listed, but the recognition he has recieved is rather underplayed). How Bourlags research is related to the dwarf rices should be expanded upon, advocacy for biotechnology, the Sasakawa project, why he recieved the nobel peace prize should be expanded upon too. Should there be a list of publications? Then there's all the normal things that come up in peer review, the lead should be longer summarisng the articles contents, use of {{Infobox Biography}}, using a inline reference system so the article is verifiable... I've had Bourlaud on my to do list for a while so I'll be happy to help get this up to featured status.--nixie 04:51, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • The parts directly cut and pasted from the Nobel Biography will have to be cleaned up too.--nixie 05:10, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • Please help out with this article. My steps yesterday were simply to add content to the article. The content still needs to be cleaned up and expanded upon in the necessary areas. There's also some confusion as to when the CIMMYT started, please add a date if you can find out for sure. --brian0918™ 14:48, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)

• I'd like to see approximate dates of capture for the photographs, or perhaps for all but the initial photo. I've done the same at Ray Davis (soldier). Ground 16:45, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)

• The first sentence is a little clunky, what with trying to say he was the father of modern ag and the father of the green revolution. I'd start with saying that he is the father of the green revolution (which almost no one disputes), in addition to pioneering many modern agricultural techniques. In addition, you might want to mention this fact about Norman Borlaug: "Borlaug failed his initial university entrance exam and had to enroll in the University of Minnesota's General College, a special college for students who weren't yet prepared for university studies." source: http://www1.umn.edu/urelate/kiosk/1102kiosk/general.html Hope some of this helps. --Alabamaboy 23:49, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • Fact added, may need rewording. --brian0918™ 00:11, 18 Jun 2005 (UTC)
• What's his nationality? or do we just have to assume he's a USian? Dunc|☺ 01:19, 18 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • It says he was born to Norweigan immigrants, but if you're implying that such info should be in the lead section, I might consider adding it, or you can if you want. --brian0918™ 02:57, 18 Jun 2005 (UTC)
• Lead is too tiny, should be doubled/tripled in size. Lots of sections are stub-section size - either expand or remove section title and merge with other sections. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus ^Talk 20:42, 19 Jun 2005 (UTC)
  • • Thanks for your comment, the article is still undergoing pretty major expansion of content, the lead will be extended when it gets closer to the finished product.--nixie 23:25, 19 Jun 2005 (UTC)

• The article looks good and just about ready to be featured now. But the intro still has room for improvement. (I just made some stylistic changes). "The resulting increases in food production..." would better be replaced by detailed information: Borlaug increased food production by such and such. Or at least a rewording to an active form: "His techniques increased..." "The green revolution" could be briefly explained in a short relative clause.--Fenice 06:07, 22 Jun 2005 (UTC)