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Minnesota[edit]

This article has undergone much work in the last few months. As of June it only had one reference [1] it now has 52 of them and has been significantly edited, expanded and vastly cleaned up. It has passed GA and I am hoping to make it to FA soon. What I am looking for review on:

What would make it fail FAC?
What are the biggest things to fix?
Where does the prose need work?
What needs to be expanded/reduced?
what is it missing?

Thanks, -Ravedave ^{(help name my baby)} 05:36, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I went through and standardized the reference system (you should stick to something standard preferably) and... cleaned up the state symbol box by removing the bottom line and consolidating the list of nicknames. I like that the font is smaller in the external links box.. The only thing I've noticed is that it needs more pictures in the lower sections (transportation (maybe the 35 tunnel? (i think its 35.. I wouldnt necessarily know).. education (a university), perhaps a picture of the governor, and perhaps a copy of the cover of one of Minnesota's prominent newspapers (I recently added a Dallas Morning News cover to the Dallas, Texas article)). drumguy8800 C T 17:55, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Are you thinking of the Lowry Hill Tunnel on Interstate 94? I added a picture of that, as well as the Hiawatha Line. I also added a picture of Pillsbury Hall at the U of M, though I think a picture of Northrop Auditorium (or maybe Northrop Mall in general) would illustrate it a little better. --Elkman - (Elkspeak) 20:33, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

err, perhaps. I remember it looking cleaner. But again you'd know better than I would. drumguy8800 C T 21:47, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Could we do a picture of mayo instead? I would prefer not to favor the UoM over the other universities in the state. -Ravedave ^{(help name my baby)} 20:39, 18 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I added a picture of a flour mill to the "Industry and commerce" section -Ravedave
I re-arranged pictures to make them fit better and removed the I-35 pic as there were two on one short paragraph. I also added a pic of hubery humphrey to the politics section. I also improved the population map by cropping and removing the key and moving it to the cities section so it could be displayed in a clearer fashion. -Ravedave ^{(help name my baby)} 07:55, 19 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

^{(help name my baby)} 20:56, 18 October 2006 (UTC) Moved auto peer review by User:False_Prophet to the minnesota talk page for brevity

Most of them have been corrected, only a few small items remain.-Ravedave ^{(help name my baby)} 05:46, 19 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

You asked for an update in regards to pictures: I'd add a picture to the History section and one near the bottom, perhaps sports/rec. Good luck! It's a great article. drumguy8800 C T 04:01, 20 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Ruhrfisch 18:56, 21 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks, APR was already run and placed on the Minnesota talk page. Whats left is as far as I can tell false hits. Have any Criterion 2a suggestions? -Ravedave ^{(help name my baby)} 20:20, 21 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  - I am working my way through all of the Peer Review requests, so I don't look at the talk pages. I can try when I get a checne to read the article closely. Ruhrfisch 02:03, 22 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Nice article. Would it be appropriate to highlight the different regions: NW, NE, SW, SE? The fifth area, the Twin Cities metro is already well covered. They each have a unique contribution to the state. How about mentions of institutions like the State Fair and WCCO radio, which dominated broadcasting for decades? Isn't the Old Log Theater unique in some way? Longest running something or other? There are probably other examples. It looks like Crystal Sugar has no article and probably deserves one; it could be mentioned along with sugar beets, which perhaps should be linked (along with soybeans and corn). I especially like what has been done with the "Popular culture" section. It lacks the cruft that collects in so many other articles. Is it worth mentioning that Sears, Roebuck and Company got its start in Minnesota? (Probably not.) JonHarder 02:51, 29 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the suggestions. I'll see about mentioning regions, maybe I can change "cities and towns" to "regions" or somthing like that. I'll try and cleanup ag mentions a bit and I'll see if I can work sears and crystal sugar in. Thanks again. -Ravedave ^{(help name my baby)} 04:53, 30 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]