Wikipedia:Peer review/Mario/archive1

Mario

This article was last weeks Improvement drive. What more do people think needs to be done for this article to reach featured article status? I know the enemies section is still a bit messy, I'll try to get round to fixing that up soon. Jacoplane 20:47, 29 July 2005 (UTC)

Its getting there, good work and keep at it.

1. I tried to smooth out the intro a bit, and I'm sure my attempt and can improved upon.
2. " as Mario games specifically lack over-complicated plots or too much character development so as to not limit his future roles." - That's a bit POV - who's to say what's over-complicated?
3. Biography needs to be longer
4. Minor grammer issues throughout article
5. Under abilities and techniques maybe a table or something with pictures for each transform would be good (although maybe a bit wishlist-y)
6. "Many contend that Mario first appeared in the video game Donkey Kong as Jumpman (Shigeru Miyamoto, his creator, contends that Mario is a descendant of Jumpman and not Jumpman himself)" as opposed to...?
7. There's a couple one sentence paragraphs in there

and of course what you mentioned about the bestiary. --RN 22:46, 29 July 2005 (UTC)

Thanks for fixing up the intro. And thanks for your feedback. You some insightful comments, they give us a good starting point to improve the article, thx! We'll take your comments into account, we hope to have Mario on the front page soon ;) Jacoplane 22:58, 29 July 2005 (UTC)

I tried to objectivize the sentence you cite in your second point, in the article's Biography section. I also replaced en-dashes (-) with em-dashes (—) throughout the whole article where applicable. I would appreciate some assistance in adding some information to Mario's biography; I believe it can be said he is somewhat lazy (falling to sleep if inactive in Super Mario Sunshine, if I recall correctly) and gourmand (as his plump appearance seems to indicate), though he livens up if the situation calls for it. Added to that, he cares for the wellbeing of other people (frequently saving the Mushroom Kingdom) and is a sensitive character (love interest with Princess Peach). Do others have suggestions or comments? Thanking you, Grumpy Troll (talk) 17:41, 6 August 2005 (UTC).

Get rid of the list of characters; takes up too much space, and this information should be condensed to sections/paragraphs on Wario, Luigi, Princess Peach and King Bowser. Same with the moves; like Wario has done, don't do a list, take the most important ones. -- A Link to the Past 15:58, August 9, 2005 (UTC)

I went ahead and rewrote the biography intro sentence to make a little more sense and be a bit less absolutist... it might need some minor tweaking --Ryan Norton ^{T | @ | C} 16:27, 9 August 2005 (UTC)

• Images should have fair use rationale. See image description page --ZeWrestler ^Talk 19:05, 11 August 2005 (UTC)
  • Yes I just realised this not too long ago. I've just added the fair use rational in all the images linked to from Wario, (See Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Wario) .. I'm going to do it for this article too. Thanks for the feedback. I find this whole situation a bit unclear though, and I wonder how Super Mario 64 became a featured article when the images found in that article have no fair use rationale.
    • I didn't realize it until the peer review for Final Fantasy VI.(Which i'm working on right now) Super Mario 64 probally either slipped through the cracks, or the policy was not affect at the time of the creation. I'll work a little bit on that pictures from that article. --ZeWrestler ^Talk 19:44, 11 August 2005 (UTC)
      • Took care of that and the Link (Legend of Zelda) articles.--ZeWrestler ^Talk 20:26, 11 August 2005 (UTC)
        • Excellent :) Jacoplane 20:36, 11 August 2005 (UTC)