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London Underground[edit]

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This is a former Featured Article which I'd like to see upgraded back to GA and then FA. I took a look at the automated suggestions and acted upon some of them although some are not relevant. I'd really appreciate hearing what you think is needed to make this article better.

Thanks, Hugahoody (talk) 21:09, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Rontombontom[edit]

Some first quick comments:

This will be a lot of work, but it is also the biggest deficiency to address: the sourcing should be completed, several complete paragraphs are unsourced.
There are several single-sentence paragraphs. Where possible, merge or expand them (see Wikipedia:Manual of Style (layout)#Paragraphs).
The styling of large numbers is inconsistent. Either write "x million" throughout, with a non-breaking space between the number and million, or write that on first occasion and "xM" everywhere else, without space and capping the M (see Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates and numbers)#Large numbers). The same applies to billions.
Abbreviate units (|abbr=on parameter in the convert template) in the infobox.
Move the Commons linkbox from the "See also" section to the "External links" section (see Wikipedia:Manual of Style (layout)#External links).
Done
The first reference contains a Note which (1) is unsourced, (2) would be better placed in a separate Notes section (unless a passage can be found that can be quoted verbatim in a |quote= parameter of a citation). --Rontombontom (talk) 17:43, 13 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I've made a start. Hugahoody (talk) 20:51, 13 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]