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Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix (film)[edit]

Article was recently made a GA. I doubt it could become an FA until the DVD is released, but if reviewers think the article looks fine right now and don't think the DVD release is subject to make the article unstable, then I'd be interested in sending it to FAC. Thanks, Fbv65edel / ☑t / ☛c || 19:18, 22 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Gran2[edit]

Okay I may as well make my suggestions about how to get this page to FA here, rather than on the talk page, so it will at least have some form of a review (unlike some of the articles I've submitted in the past, which received no comments at all...) Anyway, obviously I don't think the page can get to FA until at least the DVD has been released, and probably not until after the major awards ceremonies at the start of next year, but anyway.

  •  Done Okay first of all... the lead - It may need to be expanded at some point, but its okay now. I'd lose the cites in it though, unless there citing info that isn't mentioned anywhere else, they aren’t needed. For example the Goldenberg/Kloves source, which is mentioned again in Production, isn't needed in the lead as well.
  •  Done The infobox - Only problem is the flags, I trimmed a load earlier this month but I can easily see someone at an FAC finding six flags for the one day a problem. Maybe just UK, US, AUS and NZ? But I think this could slide.
    • I think all the flags there now are legit -- US, UK, AUS, NZ, Ireland, South Africa, Canada.
  • The plot - Possibly too long, but I can't see what you really could cut.
    • I know what you mean -- perhaps we'll set that aside for later.
  •  Done Production - Some prose issues. As they use the same source, the fact that both Newell and Nair turned it down could be mentioned in the same sentence. "David Yates was chosen to direct the film after both Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire director Mike Newell, and Mira Nair turned it down." Or something like that.
  •  Done Filming - I'm concerned that a trailer and a TV spot are being used as sources. (Refs 34, 35)
  •  Done Casting - This section is great, but I'd merge the sentences one Bellatrix to: "On 1 April 2006, McCrory announced that she was three months pregnant and had to withdraw from the film, Helena Bonham Carter was cast as her replacement." I'd also merge the Theo Walcott sentence to one of the bigger paragraphs as it seems out of place on its own.
  •  Done Differences - Very nice.
  • Distribution - Release is fine, but Marketing could be expanded. There was a line of action figures, plus a load of other stuff, so it might be a good idea to mention some of the merchandise, as only the video game is mentioned currently.
  •  Done Everything else - is fine, but I'd remove the German box office number one template, as this is the English Wikipedia after all. Gran2 21:19, 4 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Gran, thanks so much for replying. It is nice to receive some comments, even from a regular page editor like you. I agree, we should wait until the DVD -- though I guess the British editors of the page will have to update the article with that info, as it comes out a month earlier there than here in the US. In any case, I'll be sure to attend to these concerns soon -- I agree with everything you said, though as I totally ignore all the Marketing news on the fan sites (like Legos, action figures, etc.) I might need some help with that section. Thanks again. --Fbv65edel / ☑t / ☛c || 00:16, 5 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'll try and dig some stuff up over the weekend, and if there's anything good on the DVD (should be), I'll add it when it comes out, because I'll get it pretty soon. Gran2 06:11, 5 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]