User talk:Juspeck006/sandbox

Evaluation

• Points: 2
• Grade: C

Spelling/Grammar

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Language

Meets Expectations This edit is a little dry. It reads almost like just a list of facts, rather than a smooth explanation.

Organization

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Validity

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Completion

Nearly Meets Expectations There isn't a clear purpose for this paragraph, other than listing roadways in Verona.

Relevance

Nearly Meets Expectations With little information about how this connects to Verona as a city, its sort of lacking.

Sources

Nearly Meets Expectations

Citations

Exceeds Expectations Only two citations from the reference list are in the paragraph.

References

Doesn't Meet Expectations There are three reference numbers, but only two references. ==10/17/18 Evaluation by Emilenelson (talk) 16:47, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

11/4/2018 Evaluation by User:Meganly

Grade: A/B

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Expectations This seems like a clean and thorough edit, grammatically.

Language

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Organization

Exceeds Expectations You articulate what you are talking about in a clear and concise manner. Paragraphs are structurally sound and informative and seem to come from a neutral stance.

Coding

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Validity

Exceeds Expectations Your efforts in attempting this subject in a neutral and informative style is impressive, especially considering the timeliness on the financial sector. That could not have been easy.

Completion

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Relevance

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Sources

Exceeds Expectations I see that you have more than the required 10 sources. They look legitimate and that they are cited correctly.

Citations

Good I think you do a great job at citing your work, overall. I expected to see more citations happening within the third paragraph in regards to Large Corporations. You may want to work a little on that. You also need significant citation work in your edit on the Port of Amsterdam.

References

Meets Expectations The only thing I might add, in conclusion, is that the way in which you have set up your edit, I cannot tell what is original work and what you have added upon. I would need to go back and forth with the main page which I may do at a later date...Or is it all original?

Evaluation

• Points: 4
• Grade: A

Spelling/Grammar

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Language

Meets Expectations A few sentences could use some re-wording or be combined just to flow better

Organization

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Validity

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Completion

Exceeds Expectations Excellent information

Relevance

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Sources

Exceeds ExpectationsGreat sources

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==1/24/2018 Evaluation by Emilenelson (talk) 16:57, 5 November 2018 (UTC)

12/2/2018 Evaluation by User:Meganly

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Expectations This seems like a clean and thorough edit, grammatically, for a rough draft. A couple grammatical errors I found were in the last paragraph, "inclue noise and air polution" (d needed in "include" and 2 L's in pollution). Also, I am not familiar with the word, "extranalities" and it looks like spell check isn't either. I know with some subject matter, these new terms pop up, so that is why I am hesitant in critiquing your use. I wonder if you meant, "externality" (but see how spell check doesn't like that either)?

Language

Exceeds Expectations You inform your audience in a neutral, non biased tone.

Organization

Exceeds Expectations I thought the way in which you formed the outline of this edit was clear, concise, and helpful in understanding the points you would be making in this edit. You articulate what you are talking about in a clear and concise manner. Paragraphs are structurally sound and informative. *I would consider reworking or expounding on the second paragraph which discusses "Terminology" used to distinguish individuals from different ethnic backgrounds. "Terminology" is capitalized, which informs the reader of its importance, so I had hoped to hear more about what that terminology is or looks like in the context of these immigrants. Or perhaps you can link it to a Wiki that discusses this terminology? The follow up information isn't clear in its relationship to the Terminology, in my opinion.

Coding

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Validity

Exceeds Expectations I thought that your use of the information that we have learned over the course of this term and then applied to this assignment was smart and made for a fascinating and informative read.

Completion

Exceeds Expectations You have the required amount of content for this assignment. It is executed well and informative.

Relevance

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Sources

Exceeds Expectations I see that you have more than the required 20 sources. They look legitimate and that they are cited correctly (no icky red marks).

Citations

Exceeds Expectations You do a great job at citing all statements, statistics, and information. The last paragraph, "The City of Verona has partnered with public and private companies over the years to address the cities growing infrastructure demands. These partnerships have aimed to reduce many of the negative extranalities that have arisen due to increase in traffic. Such extranalities inclue noise and air polution as well as traffic congestion.[32]" has only the one citation at the end. Is this simply because all of the information was from this one source?

References

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Evaluation

• Points: 37
• Grade: C

Spelling/Grammar

Meets Expectations Since its the final edit, I think I have to get picky with things cause overall its really good. In the first paragraph there should be an "a" before diverse ethnic background, and then possibly "of Turkish descent" rather than background. A few things are missing capitals on title of stuff.

Language

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Organization

Meets Expectations Possibly move the statistic in the first section to their own section titled statistics and throw some other ones in there?

Coding

Almost meets Expectations It needs its own sandbox page. With the old posts on there it makes it a little confusing. Especially with the sources and the contents page at the top.

Validity

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Completion

Almost meets Expectations I feel like there could be more information. I know you dont have all your sources up yet though.

Relevance

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Sources

Almost meets Expectations not all sources

Citations

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References

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==12/03/2018 Evaluation by Emilenelson (talk) 05:42, 3 December 2018 (UTC)