User talk:Gpol643/Gulabi Gang
Overall Impressions[edit]
Overall, I think the article is much improved and probably close to completion. I think the writer hits almost all important issues that a reader may need to be able to learn about the Gubali Gang. I can see that some additions will be made to the education section and I hope a couple governmental perspectives make it in to the article. However, I think that the writer does a great job at getting straight to the point and not making their writing seem biased-- the writing is very factual and informational. As I mentioned earlier, I think the article could be improved by adding the governmental views of the Gubali Gang and any conflicts that have arisen between the the gang and the government. The article is well-developed as it gives readers the information they need without being biased and include details specific to the gang that may not have been know otherwise. Additionally, the writer has developed the article by better organizing the information in a readable format.
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Shayna Finkel Sefinkel (talk) 22:36, 31 March 2023 (UTC)
Peer Review[edit]
I really enjoyed this piece, and I think that it is in good shape. The lead is concise and maps out what is talked about in the other sections of the wikipedia page. The writing is clear and balanced, stating facts and explanations rather than expressing opinions. Moving forward it might be good to look over the citations used in the published page. Many of them are from news sources (and I know that citation 13 did not work for me when I tried clicking it). Additionally, I saw that two of your sources in the sandbox are from 2009 and 2016, so if you look to add more information, it may be good to use more recent studies. If you are looking to add information somewhere, you could consider looking at what political leaders think of the group. It might add a contrasting perspective or show obstacles in the group's way. It might be good to also add a short sentence in the lead about the financial security aspect of the group. That being said, I think that this article is well-developed. The sections are digestible and offer a more holistic image of the Gulabi Gang.