Template:Did you know nominations/Lea Ackermann

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The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet talk 16:23, 13 November 2023 (UTC)

Lea Ackermann

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Ackermann in 2012

... that Lea Ackermann (pictured), a German nun of the Missionary Sisters of Our Lady of Africa, was an activist fighting sex tourism and forced prostitution? Source: [1]
- Reviewed: Earnest Andersson
- Comment: ITN under recent deaths, but still eligible

5x expanded by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 20:32, 8 November 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Lea Ackermann; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed: Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Think the hook could be rewritten slightly, as it's currently just saying who she was. It could be rephrased so the later bit says what she did, something like: ALT0a "that Lea Ackermann, a German nun of the Missionary Sisters of Our Lady of Africa, fought against sex tourism and forced prostitution in East Africa?" Grnrchst (talk) 16:03, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. I don't know how you tell 5* expansion, - I use a tool, which says "Assuming article is at 5x now, expansion began 84 edits ago on November 4, 2023". She fought not only in Africa, so why restrict the hook to that? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:05, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for clarifying, I was looking at byte size on the history. As for the hook, it wasn't my intention to limit it to East Africa, but more to rephrase it to show what she did rather what she was. The hook you wrote is currently structured "Ackermann was X, she was Y". I think it should go something more like "Ackerman was X, she did Y". If you have an alternative phrasing, I'm happy to hear it. --Grnrchst (talk) 19:22, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

English is not my first language, so I defer to your judgement. "fought" sounds rather militant to me, without context? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:07, 11 November 2023 (UTC)

I don't think it's necessarily militant. In any case, if you're ok with it, then I'm happy to pass this review on ALT0a. --Grnrchst (talk) 20:28, 11 November 2023 (UTC)