Talk:William Sinclair-Burgess/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 09:29, 12 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 09:29, 12 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Section 1;
- A comma (,) after "England" in "in Longsight, Manchester, England to a shipping merchant,"
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- George Burgess, was a minister, and immigrated to New Zealand; please clarify the term minister, because sometimes it may taken as a government minister
  - The term minister was linked but have clarified anyway. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Section 2;
- Link South Canterbury Mounted Rifles
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Link 16th (Waikato) Regiment
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- A comma (,) after "August 1914"
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Some data on Geelong, type and country
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- A comma (,) after "During the Gallipoli Campaign"
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Better mention that Légion d’honneur is the highest order by France
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- This French award is uncommonly awarded to New Zealanders; this sentence is unnecessary because the same is explained in following lines with the count. So it explains that it is uncommonly awarded.
  - Done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- he became director of military intelligence and training for three months before being promoted to colonel; how being the director and the training are linked, this is a bit confusing, please reword
  - Done, made clear that it was a single title. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- What is the position of "Commandant of the New Zealand Military Forces" presently known as? Please mention that
  - I don't think it is really necessary as could be considered unnecessary detail but have done. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Section 3; all good
Lead;
- A comma (,) after "In Australia"
  - Grammatically, I don't think the comma is appropriate. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- There is a dead link
  - Deleted. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
All images are properly licensed.
Copyvio detector show 69.4% possible violation, I don't think it is Wikipedia mirror. Please check
- Have looked into this, the overwhelming majority of the article's text dates to at least 2013 whereas that webpage appears to have only existed since 2014. It is based on the wikipedia article, not the other way round. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 00:54, 23 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: Thanks for the review, all points addressed or responded to. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 03:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 12:59, 25 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]