Talk:Thomas Elfe

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:53, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "was a successful colonial period furniture" not sure we need "successful" here, nor else he'd probably not be notable.
•  Done

• fifteen-hundred -> 1,500.
•  Done

• Lead needs expansion, I would imagine that a sentence for each of the major paragraphs of the biography would suffice.
•  Done

• "He was a prolific furniture and cabinet craftsman of the American colonial period." this feels out of place being just after he was born.
•  Done

• "settled in Virginia and" link.
•  Done

• "cabinetmaker" link.
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• "in Charles Towne," link?
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• "His working career spanned almost thirty years from about 1746 to 1775.[7]" another odd "summary" sentence, better off in the lead than here.
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• "6,200 English pounds - considered a fortune at the time" Just use £6,200. And considered by whom? If you keep that somehow, the hyphen should be

an en-dash.

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• "one time director " one-time.
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• "famous furniture craftsman in the eighteenth century" in the US presumably, not globally...?
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• All of that para seems out of chronological order to the biography.
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• "From there right around 1746 he ..." -> "and in around 1746..."
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• "an ad in the" advertisment.
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• "The £150 value would be several thousand dollars in the twentieth century" we have inflation/conversion for this.
•  Done Tried to put in inflation template for English money, but not sure if I did correct. Couldn't figure out how to convert English money into American dollars. Can you help on this? I appreciate it. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:41, 1 September 2021 (UTC)

• "Charles Town" was Charles Towne above.
•  Done = should be Charles Towne. I corrected spelling.

• "the average person of the city being several times wealthier on the whole " this feels rather woolly.
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• "The wealthy Charlestonians loved London-style furnishings and would purchase most anything along these fashions that was handmade by local woodworkers. " this reads a little like a gossip column for me.
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• "over fifteen hundred pieces" 1,500
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• "paid £728 in" inflate/convert.
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• "In 1761 they submitted a bill to the church for some interior woodwork they did. " feels trivial.
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• "of a Mahogany Communion Table" Why The Capitals?
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• £157, inflate/convert.
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• "Thomas Elfe, Jr.," Wikipedia doesn't put commas before Jr. any longer.
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• "several associates hand-made over fifteen-hundred furniture pieces including fancy cabinets" already said this. And "fancy cabinets" is not encyclopedic.
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• "that were sold to Charleston's leading families and the wealthy" again, this feels like it's repeating.
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• "furniture and to put up new furniture and to do minor repairs to furniture" furniture x 3 is repetitive.
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• "the Declaration of Independence such" link to the actual one.
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• "signers of the Declaration of Independence" signatories normally, and don't repeat DoI.
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• "Elfe's work..." this para is very clunky, very short sentences introducing factoid after factoid. Needs smoothing out.
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• "Elfe ad in South Carolina Gazette - January 7" advertisement, en-dash.
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• "He didn't get" avoid contractions.
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• "married ... married" repetitive.
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• "several children.[29] Their names were" merge.
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• "made a lot of money" not eneyclopedic tone.
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• "234 acre plantation" convert.
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• £1500. inflate/convert.
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• "at £lOOO" why those O's??
•  Done

• Ref 17, should p. 7-14. be pp. 7–14?
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• Ref 23 needs an en-dash.
•  Done

• As does 27.
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• Ref 28, shouldn't jr. be Jr.? And no comma.
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• Ref 33 has one too many full stops.
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• McCrady needs en-dash.
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• ISBNs need consistent format.
•  Done

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:27, 1 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for review. I'll start working on it after lunch.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:35, 1 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

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