Talk:The Wall/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:28, 20 November 2009 (UTC)
I will begin reviewing this article and make straightforward changes as I go (explanations in edit summaries). Please revert any changes I make where I inadvertently change the meaning. I will post queries below. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:28, 20 November 2009 (UTC)
- as Gilmour refused to perform the band's usual twelve-bar blues encore. - did this occur on the same night? if it occurred before the spitting incident, then "as Gilmour had refused (or had been refusing) to perform the band's usual twelve-bar blues encore." is probably better (pluperfect tense)
- Ezrin later related the band's alarm at this method of working—they apparently viewed the erasure of material from the twenty-four track as "witchcraft". - hmm, why? Deft wizardry or weirdness is the allusion?
- I don't think the band were quite used to having so many tracks available. What Ezrin was doing was basically running a dub of the mixed drums onto two tracks, and deleting all the individual drum tracks (retained on another master tape). Previously, they'd been used to economising space in a different fashion, but certainly not by deleting material. Tape used to be extremely expensive. Parrot of Doom 19:54, 20 November 2009 (UTC)
- Ezrin later related the band's alarm at this method of working—they apparently viewed the erasure of material from the twenty-four track as "witchcraft". - hmm, why? Deft wizardry or weirdness is the allusion?
- When it came, bright blue and white lights would suddenly illuminate him, astonishing the audience - odd construction (last three words anyway) and possibly a little presumptive. Not a deal-breaker for GA though.
- With the Film section - it looks a little slim as is, maybe a line or two on the band members' views on it and its relationship with the album (?)
To conclude - passes GA, the above last bits are more of a shove towards FAC, which I think it isn't too far off. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:44, 21 November 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, I'll certainly look at the above points. I've got Gunpowder Plot and Dick Turpin to get to FA first though (The Final Cut (album) looks as though its about to be archived from FAC) Parrot of Doom 14:10, 21 November 2009 (UTC)