Talk:The Pebbles and Bamm-Bamm Show/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 16:52, 8 May 2017 (UTC)
- Comments
- I would link Cartoon Network in the references each time that it appears there.
- In the lead, you say that the show lasted one season in both the first and second paragraph. To avoid repetition, I would suggest removing the reference in the first paragraph and just mention the dates, or revise the second occurrence to avoid repetition.
- Did the characters model their band after the Archies (i.e. did the characters know about the Archies and was this part of the plot) or was the connection between the Archies and the band made by a critic/commentator? I was just wanted to clarify this point after reading the sentence in the "Premise" section.
- For the sentence (On The Christian Science Monitor's list of "the five dumbest moments" of The Flintstones, writer Chris Gaylord listed the series at number two.), I revise it slightly to better integrate the beginning dependent clause into the sentence to make it stronger. Also, Gaylord is the one that wrote the list so the attribution to the list to the Christian Science Monitor as a whole could lead to some confusion.
- Final comment
- Great job with this! I could not find many issues/improvements for this as it is a relatively straight-forward article. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 17:03, 8 May 2017 (UTC)
- Verdict
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