Talk:The Drunkard's Progress/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 18:49, 27 January 2024 (UTC)

Ah heck, I'll do this over the next few days hopefully! Great work, this was one I was curious about making at one point but couldn't find sources. Generalissima (talk)

Criterion #1: Well-written

I don't see any prose problems, good job! It's clear prose, and I don't see any MoS violations.

Criterion #2: Verifiable

Let me check a few citations here.

• Le Beau 2007, pp. 21–25
  • Pretty wide-swathe of pages here, but yeah, checks out the claim that Currier and Ives were a very large lithograph firm.
• Mills 1996, p. 12
  • Yep! This talks about John Warner Barber's Drunkards Progress. I would note the use of biblical verses (as described in Mills) here since it ties together the Temperance movement to period Christian revivalism (quite important for understanding its emergence).
• Brown 1975, p. 237
  • Checks out okay!

Criterion #3: Broad in its coverage

The rest is okay, but I feel the background section is a little lacking. I think it'd be a good idea to give just a couple sentences more about what the Temperance movement is and what it sought to do; it's really hard to understand this piece without a decent grasp of Temperance being initially a Christian revivalist thing seeing alcohol consumption as a disease and sin.

Criterion #4: Neutral

Yep! Good job so far.

Criterion #5: Stable

As far as I can tell.

Criterion #6: Illustrated

Image licenses check out, all being public domain.

Overall:

@Guerillero: Just needs a tiny bit of work in the background section. Really good job so far! Generalissima (talk) 17:29, 1 February 2024 (UTC)

Dcdiehardfan kindly provided the extra context while I was sleeping. I am going to replace the PBS website with a scholarly source, double check the source-text integrity, add page numbers for the Masters and Young (2022) citation, and make the citation consistent with the others per CITEVAR. -- In actu (Guerillero) ^{Parlez Moi} 08:15, 2 February 2024 (UTC)

Rad, the new background section looks good. I'm confident this now meets the GA criteria. Generalissima (talk) 19:25, 3 February 2024 (UTC)

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