Talk:That's Not My Penguin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 00:49, 19 June 2012 (UTC)

A quick scan of this looks good. I will review it in full in a few days, though.--Gen. Quon (talk) 00:49, 19 June 2012 (UTC)

I made some prose adjustments here.

Issues:

• Image: Add a FUR rationale on the image. It's a good pic, just needs an explanation why its here
• Plot: What is a dead man switch? It's mentioned but never explained.
• Plot: Is there any way you could make what goes on a little clearer? I'm very confused with all this universe hopping
• Plot: No need to cite the episode's plot with the episode; we're assuming the episode a source, since this is an article about the episode
• Reception: "He claimed that "either way" and that it was "awesome", mainly the hallucinations." What? I'm not sure what this is supposed to mean
• Reception: "he noted the episode" -> "he noted that the episode"
• Reception: "Nick McHatton of TV Fanatic gave the episode a "5 out of 5" as a perfect score.[12] McHatton thought that it "really used Awake's concept to its advantage".[12]" -> "Nick McHatton of TV Fanatic gave the episode a "5 out of 5" and thought that the entry "really used Awake's concept to its advantage"."
• References: In 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 11, and 12, I don't think the Websites need to be italicized, unless they're publications (Like The A.V. Club)

That's all. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 21:13, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

Looks good. Passing.--Gen. Quon (talk) 22:41, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

• Comment: In the Plot section, I think this sentence needs work: "Efrem is confused, because he is not he partner in this world." --Another Believer _(Talk) 23:36, 24 June 2012 (UTC)

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