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Date	Process	Result
November 15, 2012	Articles for deletion	Kept
January 5, 2013	Good article nominee	Listed

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The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Michael Jackson signed vocal group Men of Vizion to his record label, MJJ Music, in 1993, and released their debut studio album, Personal, three years later?

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 06:28, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review[edit]

Lead

"with some noting similarities" with some isa bit too vague, I guess that it's the wording, tweak it a bit.

Release

"Originally set to be released on May 14, 1996, Personal was released" redundancy of "released"
I see that "weeks" is used repetitively, try to switch some of the to "issue". Example: "to re-enter at the same position for the week ending on July 20." --> "to re-enter at the same position on the chart issued on July 20."
"being moving back"?
"exited" is used too much.
"tying in with the song's lyric play on reversed gender roles" what does this exactly mean?

Critical

Try to avoid farmquotting

Tracklisting

Why not using the template? (it is not mandatory ofc)

Personnel and Credits and personnel

Why two different sections?

References

All good here.

— ΛΧΣ²¹ 06:37, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I've fixed all the issues brought forth. As for the track listing, I don't own the album, and I couldn't find scans online for the credits, so I just left it as is. I will, however, put it into the template later. — Statυs (talk, contribs) 06:57, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Fair enough. Passing. — ΛΧΣ²¹ 07:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]