Talk:Peasants' Revolt/GA1
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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk · contribs) 03:37, 19 May 2013 (UTC)
This may take a while but if you have no pressing engagements... ;-) One thing first off, there are numerous Harv errors... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:37, 19 May 2013 (UTC)
- A minor point, but the article appears to need a check with Dablinks, too--Blackheath, Smithfield, Brest, etc. Thanks for your work on this one! --Khazar2 (talk) 03:55, 19 May 2013 (UTC)
Coverage -- Can't claim to be an expert in this particular area of history, but the coverage as it is appears broad and unbiased.
Structure/referencing -- Article layout and formatting/quality of references appear sound.
Prose -- Performed my habitual copyedit so pls feel free to discuss anything; outstanding points:
- Under the leadership of Wat Tyler, a contingent of Kentish rebels advanced on London. [...] Inspired by the sermons of John Ball, a radical cleric, they advanced on London. -- They advanced twice...? ;-) One suggestion that comes to mind is: Inspired by the sermons of radical cleric John Ball, and led by Wat Tyler, a contingent of Kentish rebels advanced on London. -- you might be able to come up with something better...
- There was a moral panic about the threat posed by newly arrived workers in the towns, the changing role of women... -- "The changing role of women" seems to pop up out of the blue, perhaps a sentence or two of context here or immediately before?
- Unsuccessful appeals were made both to the law courts and to the King -- Not only passive voice but a bit confusing; was it the peasants making the appeals as part of their protest, or the gentry in alarm at the peasants getting organised?
Supporting materials -- The following images have licensing tags that ought to be reviewed; I think all the images should be okay, so I won't hold up passing as GA on this account, but you should probably look at resolving them before FAC:
- File:Richard II meets rebels.jpg is tagged re. US copyright
- File:Troupe anglaise débarquant en Normandie XIVeme siecle.jpg is tagged re. copyright outside the US
- File:Sheep pen (Luttrell Psalter).png is tagged re. US copyright
- File:Towrlndn.JPG is tagged re. US copyright, and apparently has a PD-Art formatting problem
- File:DeathWatTylerFull.jpg is tagged re. US copyright
- File:Richard II King of England.jpg is tagged re. US copyright, and apparently has a PD-Art formatting problem
- Tags should all be good now, will fix the Harv errors in a moment. Many thanks for the review! Hchc2009 (talk) 12:43, 28 May 2013 (UTC)
- I'm probably missing something obvious - I found one harv error, but it sounds as though there are more. What should I be looking for? Hchc2009 (talk) 12:46, 28 May 2013 (UTC)
Summary -- Strong, comprehensive piece of work, as usual; if you can just deal with the Harv errors and the prose items, I'll be happy to pass shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:51, 28 May 2013 (UTC)