Talk:Obsessed (2009 film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 18:32, 18 October 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• "Screen Gems president Clint Culpepper conceived the basic idea of Obsessed, which was then developed by writer David Loughery and filmed in the summer of 2008, with a production budget of US$20 million." The production budget was presumably just for the filming, not the development and filming?

• "Others noted that the potential theme of interracial conflict between the Charles family and Lisa was untouched.". Who is the Charles family? Derek and Sharon? We haven't yet been told that's their surname. And we haven't had the racial aspect explained to us either; are Derek and Sharon black Americans and Lisa White? Or is Lisa black and Sharon white?

• "... although film critics were bored by the fact that Derek did not at all yield to Lisa's seduction." What is "did not at all yield" adding to "did not yield"? How is that to be reconciled with the statement in the Plot section that Derek briefly flirted with Lisa?

Plot

• "Derek Charles (Idris Elba) is the Executive Vice President of Gage Bendix, and works under Joe Gage (Bruce McGill)." Why is it important for the reader to know who Derek's boss was?

• "At work, Derek briefly flirts with temp Lisa Sheridan (Ali Larter), who later attempts to seduce Derek. Derek repeatedly rejects her ...". Derek ... Derek ... Derek. Needs rewriting.

• "... attempts to make out with him at the no-spouse Christmas party". Altogether too informal a register for an encyclopedia article.

• "Weeks later Derek and his workmates visit a resort for a conference, where he spots Lisa. He confronts Lisa, who spikes Derek's drink. Incapacitated, Derek is somewhat helpless when Lisa follows him into his hotel room and kisses Derek." The switch between he and Derek's is rather awkward and jarring.

• "Three months later, while Derek and Sharon are out reconciling their relationship". Out reconciling their relationship?

• "Lisa breaks in their house and tricks the babysitter Samantha (Scout Taylor-Compton) into letting her in under the pretense of being one of Sharon's friends". Did she break in or did the babysitter let her in?

• "Meanwhile, Lisa breaks into their house and decorates the master bedroom seductively." The subject of the previous sentence was Sharon, singular, so why "their"? Is Lisa doing the decorating seductively, or is the style of decoration seductive?

• "The film ends when Derek and Sharon embracing while Detective Reese enters their house to investigate Lisa's actions." This is a good example of the kind of thing that needs to be looked at throughout the article. "The film ends with ...".

Set and costumes

• "... a custom-built chandelier for the climatic ending of the film". Shouldn't that be "climactic?

I went to place a note on the nominator's talk page to inform him of this review, but I discovered that he resigned a couple of months ago. My comments above merely scratch the surface of the work I think is required to meet the GA criteria, and so without an active nominator behind it I am closing this review. Malleus Fatuorum 23:24, 19 October 2011 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.