Talk:Michelle Williams (actress)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:27, 4 August 2011 (UTC) I will be reviewing this article in the upcoming days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:27, 4 August 2011 (UTC)

WP:LEAD

• I don't think the word small is necessary in the second sentence.

done

• Change "Out of all of Williams's relationships since the 1990s, her engagement to actor and Brokeback Mountain co-star Heath Ledger remains the most high-profile" to "Her engagement to actor and Brokeback Mountain co-star Heath Ledger remains the most high-profile of Williams's relationships since the 1990s"

I haven't been able to find a solid source confirming that they were engaged, so I instead wrote "Her affair with actor and Brokeback Mountain co-star Heath Ledger remains the most high-profile of Williams's relationships since the 1990s"

Affair sounds like one of them was married and cheating.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:15, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

Changed it to relationship

• Maybe you should say she has several planned and post-production films in the pipeline including XYZ.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:58, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

done

Early life

• drop Michelle Ingrid

done

• link bullying

done

• this is confusing because you extend past the beginning of the next section without being complete. I.e., you start talking about Dawson's Creek before describing her early career guest appearances. Rearrange chronologically without redundancy.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:11, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

done

1990s

• popular television programs should just be television programs
  • done'
    • No.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:20, 12 August 2011 (UTC)
      • Now done

• Her role as the younger version Sil should be Her role as the younger version of Sil, I believe

done

• become Natasha Henstridge's monster should be become the monster character played by Natasha Henstridge

done

• lead to the resignation should be led to the resignation

done

• raise them both to prominence needs a citation

done

• the second paragraph needs to be restructured. After the first sentence you need to follow it with text describing how while at DC she was able to do other side projects. Then give examples of such. The second sentence right now is kind of hard to figure out right now because it seems like the sequence might be off.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:14, 6 August 2011 (UTC)

For that paragraph I've tried to focus solely on DC, despite it carrying out to 2003 and her making appearances in between. I have however made a note of it in the next paragraph that she continued to make film appearances while still doing the show.

I've rearranged the section to fit the time period (DC has it's own paragraph with her commentary on it and the part about after the show ended was placed in the 2000-2005 section. Is that better? =/ Crystal Clear x3 02:04, 13 August 2011 (UTC)

2000–2005

• She then appeared in the 2000 HBO television movie sequel If These Walls Could Talk 2, divided into three separate sections, it follows lesbian couples in different time periods.

I'm not sure what you want me to do here as the prose if the same as in the article

What about a period after 2.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:34, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

done

• Williams stars in it as the role of the victim's grieving sister. rm the role of

done

• "most acclaimed movie from critics " seems wrong since she has twice been Oscar nommed.

removed

• Commercially, the movie also did exceptionally, earning over $8.6 million. needs a budget number to make it clear why this was exceptional

removed

• "in what marked the 2005 feature film debut of Richard Ledes, the generally ignored period piece A Hole in One."->"in the 2005 feature film debut of Richard Ledes and the generally ignored period piece A Hole in One."

done

• What do you think of changing "Going from 5 theaters to more than 2,000," to "Going from a 5-theater screening to a 2,000-theater-plus screening,"

done

• "it won three accolades from the 78th Academy Awards"-> "it won three accolades at the 78th Academy Awards"--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:22, 10 August 2011 (UTC)

done Crystal Clear x3 06:24, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

• $178 million should say worldwide.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:43, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

done

2006–present

• Chris Cleaves's book needs a name and year.

done

• With 41.1 million in ticket sales at over 2,900 locations-how about some $ #s

done

• Use Ryan Gosling's last name to clue the reader about the link above. Maybe word so that the reader is clear they worked together before.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:57, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

done

Personal life

• Is there a link for godparents?

done

• Is she involved in any causes?

I've seen pics of her at some charity events but haven't found a RS about her being involved in any environmental or political causes

What kind of pics? event? How do you see pics, but not at an RS? Are you a friend of hers?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:58, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

I meant by seeing pics of her from getty images at events, but haven't seen any RSs cover her c.w. Crystal Clear x3 23:04, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

• Is she a commercial spokesperson?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:52, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

Nope Crystal Clear x3 01:20, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Both images need {{Personality rights}} tags.

done Crystal Clear x3 23:04, 12 August 2011 (UTC)

1. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Some minor issues remain. I am putting this on hold.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:10, 11 August 2011 (UTC)

• What about changing "Williams portrayed Jen Lindley" to "Williams portrayed Creek character Jen Lindley"--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:02, 13 August 2011 (UTC)

done Crystal Clear x3 03:13, 13 August 2011 (UTC)

Great work. I am passing this now.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:22, 13 August 2011 (UTC)