Talk:Jim Walton

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Conflict He's not the 6th richest person anymore...

Paul Allen regularly appears on lists of the richest people in the world; as of 2006 he is ranked by Forbes magazine as the sixth richest, worth an estimated $22 billion.

I fail to see why Jim Walton is marked as one of the "Key People" on the Wal-Mart template. Other than being the son of the founder, the article gives no indication as to how he is 'key' to the company. Has he ever held a lead executive role, or otherwise been involved in the strategy of the group? Please can someone update the article to make this clear, or remove his name from the template? Gsyhiap (talk) 16:46, 15 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Edge3 (talk · contribs) 22:09, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this article. My comments will come shortly. Edge3 (talk) 22:09, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Should the article use "Walmart" instead of "Wal-Mart", to match the Walmart article? Edge3 (talk) 22:57, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I don't think so. Sources use the term "Wal-Mart". --AparnajiTalk 09:47, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • This article is about Jim Walton only, not his family. As such, I recommend the following revisions:
  • Remove "...and Christy Walton at #11, Alice Walton at #16, and Rob Walton at #17 with net worths of $28.2 billion, $26.3 billion and $26.1 billion respectively". --This part provides too much detail on siblings, which is not warranted for Jim Walton's lead section. Edge3 (talk) 22:57, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. --AparnajiTalk 09:47, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Similarly, the following should be removed from the "Personal" section: "His brother John Walton's widow Christy Walton is at #11 with a net worth of $28.2 billion, his sister Alice Walton at #16 with a net worth of $26.3 billion and his brother Rob Walton at #17 with a net worth of $26.1 billion." Also remove the following: "Christy Walton at #6, Alice Walton at #8 and Rob Walton at #9" Edge3 (talk) 22:57, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Removed "Christy Walton at #6, Alice Walton at #8 and Rob Walton at #9". Other facts should be mentioned. No member of Walton family exists in isolation in the sources. --AparnajiTalk 09:47, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
That may be true, but this article is about Jim Walton only. If the reader wanted to learn about his relatives, then more information is available in their articles and in Walton family. Also, this sentence should also be removed or summarized because it presents an exhaustive listing of statistics. See my comment below about WP:IINFO. Edge3 (talk) 21:55, 26 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. --AparnajiTalk 05:48, 27 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • This description of Sam Walton is too long and detailed: "a clerk making $75 a month at J. C. Penney in 1940 who later cofounded Wal-Mart with his brother James Walton which started from a single store in Rogers, Arkansas in 1962, went public in 1970 and is now world's largest retailer with 2.2 million employees globally and US $469 billion in sales (2013)". I recommend simply saying "cofounder of Walmart" Edge3 (talk) 22:57, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Shortened. The above statement includes the facts mentioned by Forbes over the years while profiling Jim Walton. The statement "cofounder of Walmart" may not be representative. Reduced to "a clerk at J. C. Penney who cofounded Wal-Mart with his brother which started from a single store in Rogers and is now world's largest retailer". --AparnajiTalk 09:47, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I disagree. The detailed information should be presented in Sam Walton article, not here. Currently, the sentence is too long and convoluted, requiring further revision. Edge3 (talk) 21:55, 26 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. --AparnajiTalk 05:48, 27 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • You do not need to mention the deaths of his parents and brother, unless this information specifically enhances the reader's understanding of Jim Walton. Since the information should already be included in his parents' and brother's respective Wikipedia articles, it should be removed from this article. Edge3 (talk) 22:57, 24 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Removed deaths of his parents. Death of his brother is relevant. Affected his career significantly. --AparnajiTalk 09:47, 25 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
How did his brother's death affect his career? This needs to be explained in the article. Edge3 (talk) 21:55, 26 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. Removing his brother's death. --AparnajiTalk 05:48, 27 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The second paragraph of the "Personal" section is just a list of his rankings on the Forbes list since 2001. The list is excessive and needs to be summarized. Please see WP:IINFO, especially the 3rd point: "Excessive listings of statistics". Edge3 (talk) 21:55, 26 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. Included only his 2013 ranking. --AparnajiTalk 05:48, 27 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the "See also" section, I recommend removing all links except for Walton family. The individual Walton relatives do not need to be included, since they are already mentioned either in the article or in the Walton family article. The link to Wal-Mart is unnecessary because it is already provided within the article. Please read MOS:SEEALSO for the relevant guidelines. Edge3 (talk) 02:32, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think it is unnecessary to include the names of the children in the "Personal" section. It should suffice to simply say that they have four children. Per WP:BLPNAME, "The names of any immediate, ex, or significant family members or any significant relationship of the subject of a BLP may be part of an article, if reliably sourced, subject to editorial discretion that such information is relevant to a reader's complete understanding of the subject." The identities of the children do not appear to enhance the reader's understanding of Jim Walton, and further information should be added if you want to prove otherwise. Furthermore, the names appear only briefly in the source, which gives the source less weight for WP:BLP purposes. Edge3 (talk) 02:32, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The lead sentence suggests that "James Carr" is an alternative name to "Jim Walton". I don't think this is true. The wording in the source suggests that "James Carr" is the full given name; "Carr" would be a middle name. Edge3 (talk) 02:35, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I couldn't find Rob Walton, Alice Walton, and John Walton mentioned in the given sources. Could you please verify that the list of siblings is correct and comprehensive? Please provide a source. Edge3 (talk) 02:55, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After graduating from Bentonville High School in 1965 where he was president of his junior class, played football at all-state level and also learned to fly a plane" -- I couldn't find this in the sources. Could you please verify? Edge3 (talk) 03:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "bachelor's degree in Business Administration (BA) Marketing" -- Follow what the sources say. Just say something like "bachelor's degree in marketing". Edge3 (talk) 03:15, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Walton replaced his brother, John, on the Wal-Mart Board of Directors" -- The source doesn't mention his brother, John. Edge3 (talk) 22:54, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He is currently on the Strategic Planning and Finance committees." -- Is this mentioned in the source? I couldn't verify it. Edge3 (talk) 22:54, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He is also CEO of his family owned Arvest Bank and chairman of newspaper firm Community Publishers Inc. (CPI) owned by Jim Walton himself but founded by his father Sam Walton after acquiring the local newspaper the Benton County Daily Record, both operating in Arkansas, Missouri, and Oklahoma." -- This sentence is too long and convoluted. Please trim, reorganize, or split. Edge3 (talk) 22:54, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "They own a Dodge Dakota pickup truck which they bought in 1998." -- You should explain why this is significant. Edge3 (talk) 22:54, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Currently the article does not have enough information about Jim Walton's contributions to various companies, such as Wal-Mart, Arvest, and Community Publishers. This source has a lot of details that could be added to this article. Furthermore, the CNN Money source contains a lot of details about his personal life and his relationships with his family. This info could also be added to this article. Edge3 (talk) 23:06, 29 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

There are several issues that need to be resolved before this article becomes a Good Article, and they have not been addressed over the past several days. Due to the lack of editing activity, I am closing this review.

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    The writing style could be improved in some places. A copyedit might be necessary.
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
    Trim the "See also" section.
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    Please verify that the information in the article accurately reflects what's in the sources.
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    The scope should be expanded to include more details about Jim Walton's career.
    B. Focused:
    The article initially devoted too much attention to Jim Walton's personal wealth and ranking on Forbes, relative to other aspects of his life. Although this has already been addressed during this review, all involved editors should monitor future edits to ensure that this biography presents a balanced overview of his life.
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    Thank you for the progress that you've made on this article. I encourage you to add more meaningful content and use more reliable sources. You should renominate this article at WP:GAN after you've finished the necessary revisions. Edge3 (talk) 17:18, 4 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Real time net worth[edit]

Is it possible to automatically change the net worth to whatever it says here http://www.forbes.com/billionaires/list/#version:realtime or can it only be done manually --88.111.129.157 (talk) 20:06, 17 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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