Talk:Jesus Piece (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Retrohead (talk · contribs) 11:23, 8 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The 'Commercial performance' requires serious research and expansion. If you're unable to find additional information, merge it into some other section. Two sentences can not constitute a section. Try finding second week sales and beyond, as well as international sales.
Do not mention rating in the prose, because they are already given in the table. Also, avoid stating non-grade rating in the table, because overall descriptions such as "favorable" or "unfavorable" are personal impressions.
You can paraphrase some if the critics in order to present the reader the full extent of the review, rather than citing a single part. If the quotation is interesting or amusing, it might be better to cite, but in other cases, try paraphrasing.
Any awards in the 'Accolades'? Grammys, VMAs, or something similar?
I think that "engineer" and "featured artist" should be omitted from the personnel if you're using Allmusic.
The box quote seems to jump from nowhere. I don't see how it is related to the album's concept, nor what it additionally says that hasn't been said in the section about discussing Christianity and rap music.
There are quite of YouTube links used here, which shouldn't be featured in a GA. Those need to be replaced.
There is inconsistency with the reference formatting. For example, HipHopDX is variously placed in a "work" and "publisher" template.

Non-reviewer comment: Three dead links need to be addressed Snuggums (talk / edits) 23:21, 9 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

That inconsistency your talking about is because some of these sources are independent.
There are some GAs that don't omit the two credits you mentioned from the personnel when using AllMusic. DepressedPer (talk) 14:09, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'm glad you've accepted to cooperate on this one DepressedPer. According to WP:MOS-ALBUM#Personnel, if citing from Allmusic, do not include "composer" credits (not engineer). Also the commercial performance desperately needs expanding. I can not pass the article with such omission.--Retrohead (talk) 18:19, 10 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I got rid of the credits you mentioned in Personnel and expanded Commercial performance but I couldn't find international sales for it. DepressedPer (talk) 03:25, 11 November 2014

Failed—Sorry, but there are too many copyediting aberrations and dead links that require more time to deal with. Appreciate all your help so far DepressedPer, but I can not pass the article in its current state.--Retrohead (talk) 00:29, 16 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]