Talk:Entre a Mi Mundo/GA2

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Reviewer: Basilisk4u (talk · contribs) 02:25, 21 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I will review this article. Cheers! Basilisk4u (talk) 02:25, 21 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Notes[edit]

Lead
  • The title of the album should be written as Entre a Mi Mundo in all mentions of the name according to WP:CAPS.
  • "Entre a mi mundo incorporates mostly Tejano music and rancheras." This paragraph seems a bit out of place where it is, consider adding it to the second paragraph, which talks about the album's musical style.
  • "The album's production was postponed owing to Selena's relationship with guitarist Chris Pérez, which brought negative criticism from her father and manager Abraham Quintanilla Jr., who threatened to disband the group." --> "The album's production was postponed due to Selena's relationship with guitarist Chris Pérez, which garnered disapproval from from her father and manager Abraham Quintanilla Jr., who threatened to disband the group."
  • "A further complication was Selena's Ven conmigo Tour..." --> The record's creation was further complicated by Selena's Ven Conmigo Tour..."
  • Is there a source for "Como la flor" being her signature song? I couldn't seem to find the info in the body.
  • "'La carcacha', which tells the story of a barrio teen romance that Selena never had" --> The "that Selena never had" part is not necessary for the lead.
Production and development
  • "At that time, Selena was also dealing with her relationship..." --> "At that time, Selena was also involved in a relationship..."
  • "the antithesis of his "clean image" kids" --> "the antithesis of his children's "clean image""
  • When did Selena's father begin to accept the relationship?
  • "After Selena had eloped..." --> "After Selena's elopement"
  • "Vela was also in charge of the music sequencer during pre-production of the album." Would "music sequencing" be better to use? Or is a music sequencer a piece of equipment?
Singles
  • Since this section discusses all of the songs, I think the title of the section should be changed to "Composition"
  • "He had seen an old, broken down car and had told Joe Ojeda, the band's keyboardist, that he wanted to write a song about the old car." --> "He saw an old, broken down car and told Joe Ojeda, the band's keyboardist, that he wanted to write a song about the vehicle."
  • "Quintanilla III had then asked Ojeda what "a broken down car" means in Spanish, and Ojeda replied "Carcacha"." --> "Ojeda then assisted Quintanilla III with the Spanish translation of the phrase "a broken down car", determining the correct phrase to be "Carcacha"."
  • Was the girl who commented that Quintanilla III had a nice car also at the store? Or was it a different time?
  • How does the car relate to the story of the barrio teen romance? Explain this further.
  • "Quintanilla III had stated in an interview..." Remove "had"
  • How did the poor plastic flower salespeople relate to the writing of "Como la Flor"?
  • "Como la flor" helped Selena to dominate the Latin music charts and become immensely popular in Mexico, where Mexican-Americans are not liked among citizens, which was well received by critics." What was well-received by critics? It sounds like the fact that Mexican-Americans are not liked among Mexican citizens was well received.
  • "Richard Torres of Newsday believed that Selena had an emotional vocal purity that helped make "¿Qué creias?" a international hit." "emotional vocal purity" should be in quotation marks.
  • "Pérez also confessed to "doubling" his guitar solos on the song which he had only done for "Las cadenas"." What does it mean that he had only done it for "Las cadenas"? Had he never used this technique before?
  • "Hector Saldanna of San Antonio Express-News wrote that "Vuelve A Mi" was a "hot little polka".[28] TerraMexico believed "Vueleve A Mi" was a "successful hit".[29]" --> "Hector Saldanna of San Antonio Express-News wrote that "Vuelve A Mi" was a "hot little polka", while TerraMexico described the song as a "successful hit"."
Release
  • "It eventually sold 300,000[38] or 385,000[39] copies in its first year" make sure you specifically say which source says what, like "According to Billboard..." for each
Entre a Mi Mundo tour
  • Looks good!
Critical reception
  • Remove this part from the Allmusic quote, as it does not have to do with critical discussion of the album: "She was named Top Female Entertainer and Female Vocalist of the Year for three years straight at the Tejano Music Awards. Tracks include "Si la quieres," "Yo te sigo queriendo," and "Las cadenas""

On hold[edit]

I have placed the review on hold in order for these concerns to be addressed. Cheers! Basilisk4u (talk) 03:50, 26 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

 Done Best, Jonatalk to me 04:31, 26 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Wow! Thanks for your fast response. Passing the article :) Basilisk4u (talk) 05:18, 26 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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