Talk:Devil's Halo/GA1
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 20:13, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
Infobox[edit]
- This is just a personal preference, but instead of using commas, you could use a flatlist with bullet points for the "Genre" and "Producer" parameters; however, it is unnecessary and just for stylistic purposes
- Each genre listed needs to have a source; no unsourced genres in the infobox
- Everything in the infobox is based on what's cited in the article (WP:INFOBOXREF) Dan56 (talk) 00:12, 23 June 2016 (UTC)
Lead[edit]
Paragraph 2[edit]
- "The album was released on October 6, 2009, by Downtown Records and charted modestly, but was well received by most critics." --> "The album was released on October 6, 2009, by Downtown Records; it charted modestly and was well received by most music critics."
- Please link "music critics" to the article for "Music journalism"
Background[edit]
- "Ndegéocello spent over a year writing the songs from Devil's Halo, being inspired in part by her trip to Ireland. "I went to a couple of pubs and there were much older gentlemen playing the guitar and just singing these amazing, simple songs", Ndegéocello recalled." --> "Ndegéocello spent over a year writing the songs from Devil's Halo, being inspired in part by her trip to Ireland: "I went to a couple of pubs and there were much older gentlemen playing the guitar and just singing these amazing, simple songs", Ndegéocello recalled."
Music and lyrics[edit]
Paragraph 1[edit]
- Please remove the link to the article for "fusion (music)"
Paragraph 2[edit]
- "For the song "Slaughter", tried to weave together sonic influences from the producers Trevor Horn and RZA, as well as the bands Yes, Sade, and The Human League" --> Reword please; the first part doesn't make sense to me
Release and reception[edit]
- Please add the Metacritic score to the "Professional Ratings" box
- That would be overemphasis of one source/point of view, IMO (WP:CRIT#Neutrality and verifiability), as well as redundancy; it's already discussed in detail in the section. Dan56 (talk) 00:20, 23 June 2016 (UTC)
Paragraph 1[edit]
- "featuring some of Ndegéocello's most strongest compositions yet.[22]" --> "featuring some of Ndegéocello's strongest compositions yet.[22]"
- Please insert a "the" in between "According to Q," and "songs expressing frantic feelings..."
Charts[edit]
- Please use the correct chart format per Template:Album chart
References[edit]
- "reflist" --> "Reflist|30em"
End of GA Review:[edit]
Great work! An all–in–all well–written article! On hold for seven days to allow for changes. Please @PING me with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thanks and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 20:33, 22 June 2016 (UTC).