Talk:46th Infantry Division (United Kingdom)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 13:23, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:23, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • No DABs, external links OK
  • All images appropriately licensed
  • The Bren carrier photo in the Home defence section needs a caption
    It looks like a stray character kept the caption from being viewed, I have fixed this.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Captions aren't considered full sentences and generally don't require a full stop at their ends
  • What do you mean by county association? The WWI division appears to have drawn from multiple counties; did it have a formal association with one particular county that's not in the unit's article?
    What I was trying to get at was that they didnt put (North Midland) in the middle of their title. I have reworded this sentence, do the changes work?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • However, the 46th Division's men were ill-equipped, lacked transportation, were spread out and were assigned to guard strategically important locations known as vulnerable points. awkward and needs a better transition from the previous sentence. Perhaps something about security duties considered more important than training?
    I have reworded, do the changes work?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • establishment of 108 2 in (51 mm) mortars no need to convert the measurement again. And spell out two to avoid reader confusion with 108
    Conversion left for the first mention, and removed for the second along with the suggested change.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Was the division understrength in Boys rifles and trucks as well?
    I have made some tweaks here, but yes.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • a major defensible position and I suggest combining this sentence with the preceding one
    Tweaked, and hopefully now works?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • link lines of communication, landmine
    Links addedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • hyphenate right rear, Churchill tank equipped, back and forth, house to house
    Hyphens addedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Curtis was assigned transferred or reassigned?
    I switched it up to reassignedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • the ongoing fighting heavy?
    TweakedEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • A lot of churning of commanders in 1940–41. Should reasons why be added?
    I moved some info from a note into the main text, and added the reasons for the others during this period.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Capitalize River and expand the link to the Garigliano to include it. do the same with every river you mention on first use
    Done so where appropriateEnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Each one contested by the 114th Jäger Division, requiring ridges and hills to be captured. What are you trying to do here? Should it have been combined with the previous sentence?
    Do the changes work?EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Again faced by the 26th Panzer Division, the 46th fought another series of river-crossing actions, and through 20 November captured various hills and villages.[111] On 3 December, after several days of preparation, the division pushed across the Lamone (River!) and fought over the next four days to capture several villages held by the German 305th Infantry Division. I'd expect hills and villages to be captured as the division advanced. Important thing in these sentences is that it fought a series of actions against the 16th Panzer, and then a major battle against the 305th ID.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:13, 21 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    I have tweaked these sentences per your recommendation.
    Thank you for your time and review, I have attempted to address all points raised.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:06, 22 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    • Looks fine, although I did add one needed hyphen in your new text.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:35, 23 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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